Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the given household data illustrates information about salary in US citizens over the period from 2007 to 2015 year. overall it can be seen that The salary holders above 100,00 USD shows differnces over that time and incresed 2015 in the salary holders above us remained the lowest salary 2007 furthermore salary incresed 2011 to 2015 year
body paragraph 1 looking at the details salary holders about 100,oo us increasd 2015 similarly remained 25,000 the lowest salary in 2007years
paragraph 2 in contrast us citizens overs the period from incresed 2011 to more 2015 ye
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While there is an attempt to identify some trends, the information is fragmented and lacks the necessary detail to provide a clear overview or meaningful comparisons. The data points are often unclear or incorrectly transcribed (e.g., '100,oo us'), and the analysis is too brief to cover the main features of the chart effectively. To improve, you must ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed with sufficient supporting data and a clear, logical structure.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks a logical structure. While there are attempts at paragraphing, the labels 'body paragraph 1' and 'paragraph 2' are inappropriate for an IELTS essay. The flow of ideas is disjointed, and there is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences or ideas together. The text reads more like a series of disconnected notes than a coherent summary. To improve, focus on using transition words like 'however,' 'furthermore,' and 'in contrast' to connect your sentences and ensure your ideas follow a logical progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word formation and spelling, such as 'incresed' and 'differnces,' which hinder readability. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately or with any degree of precision. You should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' 'peaked,' and 'declined,' and ensure you proofread your work to correct basic spelling errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors in sentence structure, punctuation, and basic grammar. Many sentences are incomplete or lack necessary articles and prepositions, making them difficult to follow. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the frequent errors in basic syntax impede communication. To improve, focus on mastering simple sentence structures first, ensuring you have a clear subject and verb, and then gradually work on incorporating more complex structures like relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions.
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