Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

THE BAR GRAPH EXPRESS THE NUMEROUS OF HOUSEHOLDS IN THR US BY THEIR ANNUAL INCOME IN 2007,2011AND 2015.

THE GRAPH SHOWS THAT IN THE YEAR OF THE INCOME OF HOUSEHOLDS IN THE YEAR 2007 IS $ 76,000 AND IN THE NEXT YEAR 2011 IT BECAMES DOWN ONLY $75,000 MOROVER, THE ECONOMY IS PROPER IN THE SESSION OF 2015 THAT IS $75,000 TO $99,000.IN THE HOUSE HOLDS INCOME IN THE YEARS 2011 IS LITTLE MORE AS COMPARED TO THE OTHER YEARS. THE BAR GRAPH EXPRESS THAT IN THE YEAR 2011 THE HOUSEHOLDS INCOME IS MUCH $25,000-$49,999 WITH THE PASSAGE OF TIME THE GROWTH IS BECOME UNSTAIBLE BUT STILL THE 27 HOUSEHOLDS INCOME WERE INBETWEEN IS $25,000.IN THE LAST ANALYSE THE GRAPH BECOME HIGHER THE 34 HOUSEHOLDS ANNUAL INCOME IS $100,000 OR MORE ON THE ANALYSING THE GRAPH ONLY IN THE YEAR 2015 PEOPLE GREW MORE THAN OTHER YEARS.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you attempt to describe the data, the information provided is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, you state that the income in 2007 was $76,000, which does not clearly reflect the data categories provided in the chart. Furthermore, the summary lacks a clear overview of the main trends, and the data points mentioned are difficult to follow. To improve, ensure you accurately identify the categories and years, and provide a clear, concise summary of the most significant changes or patterns observed across the three years.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical organization and paragraphing. The text is presented as a single block, making it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are largely absent or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'in the year' and 'the graph'. There is no clear structure (introduction, overview, body paragraphs), which hinders the reader's ability to understand the relationship between the data points. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks and transition words like 'in contrast', 'furthermore', or 'subsequently' to link your ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. Phrases like 'the economy is proper' and 'the growth is become unstaible' are not appropriate for an academic report. There is significant repetition of basic words such as 'graph', 'income', and 'households'. Additionally, there are several spelling errors, such as 'numerous' (used instead of 'number'), 'morover', and 'unstaible'. To achieve a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more precise terms related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'significant increase'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the bar graph express'), tense usage (e.g., 'the growth is become'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, making them difficult to parse. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using correct verb tenses when describing past data. Proofreading for basic punctuation and capitalization is also essential.

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