Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Information about the number of households in the us by their annunal income in 2007, 2011 , and 2015 is illustrated by the given bar chart .
Overall , at the prima facia gland , it is clearly visible that plent of us households whoes annual income less than $25000 was the highest in year 2015. in year 2007, 2011 , 2015 , number of us household whoes income was $25000- $49999 remaind stable at approximatly 21 million.
Scrutinising deeper in to the obtainable information , we can clearly visible that us household whoes income [redacted phone] or more at approximatly 29 million and 28 million , in year 2011 and 2015 respectively Menwhil plenty of us household whoes annual income less than $ 25,000which was the lowest numbers throuht the periods . Moreover ,number of us household whoes annual income $ 25, 000 - $49,999 which was pinacle of the point in year 2011 .
Digging depper in to the chart we can clearly observed that the number of us household whoes incomr $ [redacted phone] or more remaind stable in provided two year at approximatly 27 million.
Hereby, i conclude my report
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting information from the chart, but there are significant inaccuracies in data interpretation. For instance, the student states that households earning between $25,000 and $49,999 remained stable at approximately 21 million, whereas the chart shows this group started at 27 million in 2007, rose to 29.5 million in 2011, and dropped to 28.5 million in 2015 (the 21 million figure actually belongs to the $50,000–$74,999 bracket). Additionally, sentences like 'plenty of us households whoes annual income less than $25000 was the highest in year 2015' conflict with the data showing the highest group overall was $100,000 or more in 2015. Due to these frequent misreadings and a lack of a coherent overview of the main trends, the response falls into the Band 4.5 to 5.0 range, warranting a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response exhibits some basic organization into paragraphs, attempting to use signposts like 'Overall' and 'Scrutinising deeper in to the obtainable information'. However, the overall progression is disrupted by confusing phrasing, repetitive sentence structures, and incorrect paragraph breaks such as 'Hereby, i conclude my report'. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, and referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical development of ideas. This aligns closely with the Band 5 descriptors, where organisation is present but lacks clear progression and control of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very limited and basic, featuring frequent spelling and word-choice errors such as 'annunal', 'plent', 'whoes', 'remaind', 'approximatliy', 'Menwhil', 'throuht', 'pinacle', 'depper', and 'incomr'. While the student attempts some less common phrases like 'prima facia gland' (misusing 'prima facie' and 'glance') and 'scrutinising deeper', these attempts result in noticeable errors and unnatural collocations that cause difficulty for the reader. This performance sits firmly at Band 4.0 to 4.5, reflecting a basic and restricted lexical range with frequent errors that strain comprehension.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text is dominated by simple sentence fragments and faulty attempts at complex structures, missing essential verbs and prepositions (e.g., 'us household whoes income 100000 or more at approximatly 29 million'). Punctuation and capitalization are poorly handled, with spaces placed before punctuation marks and many sentences lacking proper terminal punctuation. Grammatical errors are very frequent and frequently distort meaning, aligning with the Band 4 descriptor where errors are prominent and hinder communication.
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