Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given bar graph illustrates the proportion of households with their yeared incomes in the US form 2007,2011 and 2015. Further more provided data is represented numberes in millions for houses and incomes in thousandes.
Overview, The people who have income more the ten thousands are the highest in initial years and showed suden rosed in last period. Whereas, 75,000 dollar group are the lowest and showed now big changed over the period. The left over categoies had miner fluctuated trends during the time frame.
By 2007, $100,000 group is the highest wiht aproximate 30 million houses, Whereas, $75,000 group considered to be lowest number of houses accounted with blow then 15 million. Moving forward the 100,000 dollar group represented huge growth at end of 2015, woth around 5 million more househoulds. however their is stable development, people who are at 75,000 dollar group wiht not specific shifts and hit 15 millions at the end of last period.
On the other hand 25,000 to 49,999 dollar categories should litter rised at 2011, at closed to 30 million, but after ther finished of 2015 it decreased by small portioned near to 20 million houses. While, 50,000 dollar group had minor up and down whole year, consisted around 20 to 22 million househoulds.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the main features of the bar chart regarding US households by income level in 2007, 2011, and 2015. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting and misinterpretation of the categories. For instance, the student states that the $25,000 to $49,999 category 'decreased by small portioned near to 20 million houses,' whereas the chart shows it went from 27 to 28.5 and then 28.5/28 million (remaining relatively stable rather than dropping to 20 million). Furthermore, the overall selection of features is somewhat disjointed, and the overview lacks clarity. While some comparisons are attempted, the numerous inaccuracies in reading the graph limit the task achievement score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text is organized into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, overview, and body sections. However, logical progression is severely hindered by awkward transitional phrases like 'Further more provided data' and 'Overview, The people who have...'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas lacks clear structure, making it difficult to follow the relationships between data points. Cohesive devices are either misused, overly mechanical, or absent, leading to a choppy and disjointed reading experience throughout the response.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
Vocabulary is basic and heavily impacted by spelling and word-formation errors. Examples include 'yeared' instead of 'annual', 'numberes' for numbers, 'thousandes' for thousands, 'suden rosed' for sudden rise, 'categoies' for categories, 'miner' for minor, and 'wiht' for with. The student attempts some less common vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'fluctuated' and 'development', but the high frequency of lexical and spelling errors impedes understanding and restricts the vocabulary score to a lower band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors in basic sentence structure, tense usage, and prepositions. Examples of erroneous constructions include 'The people who have income more the ten thousands are the highest', '75,000 dollar group considered to be lowest number of houses accounted with blow then 15 million', and 'there is stable development'. Simple sentence structures dominate, and attempts at complex structures are generally faulty. Punctuation is also erratic, with misplaced commas and lack of proper capitalization.
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