Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the bar graph show the number of households in millions and there anual income in 2007,2011and 2015.In 2007 25 million people got less then 25000 dollar .Around 28 million household got 25000 dollar to 49999 dollar and around 21 million workers got 50000 dollar to 74999 dollar .around 14 million household workers got 75000 dollar to 99999 pounds this is the population in 2007 how earned less as compare to others on same year .Around 29 million people earned 10000 dollar of more.looking into 2011 record explained by the bar graph .The large amount of worker around 30 million workers got anual income of 25000 dollar to 49999 dollar the largest group of worker in 2011.Where as 29 millon worrkers got less then 25000 dollar annualy .50000 to74999 dollar,75000 to 99999 dollar,100,000 or more anual income got by 21 million,13 million and 28 million workers respectively. 2015 is the year in which 33 million workers which is quit large amount got less than 25000 dollae anual income.15 million household workers got anual income of 75000 to 99999 dollars.50000 to 74999 ,25000 to 49999 and less then 25000 dollars earned by 22 million, 28 million and 29 millions peoples who are househelps

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the bar graph showing US households by annual income, but it falls short in providing a fully developed or accurate summary. While some data points are mentioned, such as '25 million people got less then 25000 dollar' in 2007, the information contains numerous inaccuracies and confusion regarding the categories (e.g., mixing up currencies like '99999 pounds' and misidentifying households as 'workers' or 'househelps'). There is no clear overview of the main trends or general patterns in household income over the three years, and the information is presented as a list of disjointed figures rather than a well-structured summary. This minimal engagement with the visual data keeps the score at this level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text suffers from a lack of logical organization and clear progression. The information is presented in a dense, continuous block of text without proper paragraphing to separate the years or different income brackets. Cohesive devices are either missing or used inaccurately (e.g., 'Where as', 'looking into 2011 record explained by the bar graph'), which makes the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Referencing is also weak, as pronouns and category labels are applied inconsistently. To improve, the writer needs to group related data into distinct paragraphs and use clear transitional phrases to guide the reader through the comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple phrasing such as 'got', 'earned', and 'people'. There are frequent errors in word choice and terminology, such as referring to households as 'workers' or 'househelps', and an incorrect currency unit ('pounds' instead of dollars). Spelling errors are also present, including 'anual', 'quit', and 'dollae'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic numerical data, the restricted range and persistent errors prevent it from achieving a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences or faulty attempts at complex ones. Punctuation and capitalization are frequently neglected, as seen in sentences starting without capital letters and missing commas around numbers (e.g., '2007,2011and 2015'). There are numerous grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('who are househelps') and awkward phrasing like 'how earned less as compare to others on same year'. These frequent errors place a strain on the reader and restrict the grammatical score.

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