Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the rendered bar graph depicts the information pertaning to the count of households in the us by their yearly earning from 2007 to 2015

in an overview,it evident that the highest number of households witnessed in $100,000 or more while the lowest seen in $75,000-$99,999 over the period mentioned

to commence with,the less than $25,000 annual income spend on households was 25 millions in 2007 which increased by 3 millons in 2011 afterthat it stable in 2015 noticeably,$25,000-$49,999 was more than 27 millons in 2007 while it inclined to 30 millions in 2011 before inclined it decreased by 2 millions in 2015 ,in 2007 $50,000-74,999 the income of household spend ranged between 20 millions and 22 millions in the given period

shisting towards remening details, the $75,000-99,999 was 15 millions in 2001 it was rem

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the chart’s subject and gives an overview, noting that the $100,000-or-more group is generally the largest and the $75,000–$99,999 group the smallest. It also reports some figures for the lower-income categories. However, coverage is incomplete and several details are inaccurate or unclear: the highest group is not largest in 2007 or 2011, and the account of the $25,000–$49,999 category says it “decreased by 2 millions” without clearly stating its 2015 level. The final sentence breaks off, leaving the $75,000–$99,999 and $100,000-plus trends largely unreported. The response is also 15 words below the required minimum. Include a complete overview and report the main changes across all five bands accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening, an overview, and body sections introduced by phrases such as “to commence with” and “shifting towards remaining details.” These markers show some awareness of sequencing. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several categories are packed into one long sentence, punctuation is sparse, and the final sentence is incomplete. Connections between figures are also unclear, particularly in “before inclined it decreased by 2 millions.” Use separate sentences or paragraphs to group categories, and make each comparison explicit. A clearer sequence—overview, then lower and middle income groups, followed by the highest-income group—would help readers track the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “overview,” “increased,” “stable,” and “ranged,” and it attempts to describe trends rather than simply list labels. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or awkward: “yearly earning,” “income spend on households,” and “witnessed in” do not express the intended meanings naturally. Spelling errors such as “pertaning,” “millons,” and “shisting” also reduce clarity, while repeated use of “increased” and “inclined” limits range. Choose precise terms such as “annual income,” “the number of households,” “rose,” and “remained stable,” and check spelling carefully. This would make the description more natural and easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and uses time references, but grammatical control is inconsistent, and many sentences are difficult to parse. For example, “in an overview,it evident” is missing a verb, while “the less than $25,000 annual income spend on households was 25 millions” has problems with sentence structure and agreement. The long sentence beginning “noticeably” joins several comparisons without clear punctuation, and the final clause is unfinished. Most structures are simple or extended through chaining rather than controlled subordination. Build shorter complete sentences, use accurate forms such as “the number of households was” and “it remained stable,” and check articles, verb forms, and punctuation before submitting.

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