Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

some people say History is one of the most vital school subjects. Oher think that in today's world subjects like Science and technology are most crucial than History.

Overall, some people think History is most important school subjects. I think these citizen's are right. Since, History is most important subject it give you alot of opportunity, to learn about your past and read what they do in their own time. They give you a memorable memory.

On the other hand, other individuals think subjects like science and technology are most essential than History. So i think they also right. As, world is now going modern and fast and everything is now happening online and. Persons love to learn subjects like technology and AI. So the reason is that now their interest in science subjects so i think they right.

In conclusion, we talk about in this topic is which subjects is most major nowadays. I think both people are right in their own opinion. However, In my opinion History is most important topic it is not only important. Furthermore, it is the best subject to learn you learnt a lot of think in that subject. But, the othr people think is that they love learn science and AI and like technology subjects.

But, I love to learn History last time I read the book of History so I impress so I think everyone need to learnt the topics of History.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You address both views: the first body paragraph gives reasons for studying History, while the next mentions modern technology, science and AI. You also state a preference for History and add a personal example about reading a history book. However, the discussion is minimal: claims such as History offering “alot of opportunity” and people’s interest in technology are not explained or supported with a specific example. Your position also becomes unclear when you say both sides are right before concluding that History is most important. The response is 231 words, 19 words below the required minimum; the nine words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop each view with a clear reason and example, then maintain one consistent opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall structure, with an opening, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Connectors such as “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and several ideas are repeated rather than developed—for example, the conclusion restates that both sides are right before returning to History. Some linking phrases are awkward or incomplete, including “Since,” at the start of a sentence and “As,” before the explanation about modern life. References such as “they” and “these citizen's” are not always clear. Use topic sentences, link each reason to an explanation, and make pronoun references precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant basic vocabulary for the topic, including “History,” “Science,” “technology,” “modern,” and “AI,” and attempt some variation with “vital,” “crucial,” and “essential.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as “most important topic,” “learn a lot of think,” and “memorable memory.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “Oher,” “othr,” and “alot,” also reduce accuracy. These choices sometimes make the intended meaning less clear, although the general topic remains understandable. Build a more precise set of terms for explaining the value of each subject, and check spelling and natural word combinations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including “Since, History is most important subject it give you…” and “However, In my opinion…”. However, sentence patterns are limited, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and punctuation occur throughout. For example, “it give you” should be “it gives you,” while “History is most important subject” needs an article. The sentence beginning “As, world is now going modern…” is also incomplete or incorrectly punctuated, and “everyone need to learnt” combines an incorrect verb form with subject–verb disagreement. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses using “because,” “although,” or “which.”

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