Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

To begin with, there are several reasons why this schools subjects is important in our daily life . The main reasons is that all world faviourte subjects in science and more then technology in history can have direct people on society . Many people face this issue in their daily live , it can also influence their lifestyle in different way . For example it may affect new technology in education system library and computer skills and the different skills achievment . Most students the difficult subject in english and the practice in long time and improve my english . I want to improve my english and four skills reading and writting , speaking and listening skills . The important point the teacher can have both positive and negative effect . It mainly depend on how people use and how they deal with the situation .

Moreover , there are some possible improve the subject way to situation . People should have proper knowledge and should make responsible decisions . The government schools and collage , university the new technology and new machines system computers and biomedical students in library system is very improvement in government sector . The science students big room in computer system and new techology all students ahcievement in skills . The government sector can also play an important role by providing guidance and support . The government give awat the free laptop in top holder students .

In conclusion , other poor student not the focus study is important issue that should not be ignored . If student which work togather , the negative effect can be reduced and way to improve the situation .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes a limited attempt to address the topic, but it does not clearly discuss both views about History and Science/technology or state a relevant opinion. The opening refers to science, technology and history, yet the relationship between these subjects and their importance is difficult to follow. The examples about computers, libraries, laptops and government support do not explain why History matters or why modern subjects might be more important. The conclusion shifts to “other poor student” and studying together, which does not resolve the question. To improve, present one clear reason for valuing History, one for prioritising Science and technology, and then state your own position. Support each with a specific, relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic paragraph structure, with an opening, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “Moreover” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to organise the response. However, the ideas within paragraphs do not develop in a clear sequence, and the links between sentences are often difficult to understand. For example, the move from technology in education to improving English skills and then to teachers’ effects is not explained. The second paragraph similarly lists government, universities, computers and laptops without showing how these points connect to the essay question. Build each paragraph around one main idea, then explain and illustrate it; use linking words only where they express a clear relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts topic-related vocabulary, including “technology,” “education system,” “computer skills,” “government sector” and “biomedical.” This gives some relevant language to work with, but word choice, spelling and collocation problems often make the intended meaning unclear. Examples include “all world faviourte subjects,” “direct people on society,” “the different skills achievment” and “the government give awat the free laptop.” Several expressions are repeated without adding precision. Aim to use familiar words accurately before trying more ambitious vocabulary, and check spelling and natural word combinations. More precise terms such as “historical understanding,” “scientific innovation” and “digital skills” would help express the comparison directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences and use clauses, for example “It mainly depend on how people use and how they deal with the situation.” However, control of sentence structure is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, articles, plurals and verb forms frequently obscure the message. In “the main reasons is,” the subject and verb do not agree; “it mainly depend” also needs an agreeing verb. Some sentences lack a clear grammatical structure, such as “Most students the difficult subject in english,” while punctuation spacing and sentence boundaries are also unreliable. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas with clauses such as “because” or “while.” Check each sentence for a clear subject, verb and complete meaning.

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