Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In recent years, has become say History is one of the most important school subjects . Other people think that in today's world subjects like Science and technology are more important than history .

It is generally believe that , the History is the most important school subjects can believe some people . And my believed that , the History is the most important subject and no . Know that the History school subjects can learn the Pakistan History and Pakistan privences and I can learn the Quaid-e- Azam is the most famous and respect full person in Pakistan . He built a Pakistan for the Muslims of Indians Nation . The Muslims can live in respectful person don't danger in Hindus .

And , the some people can believe that the Science and technology are more important than history . The science is the most important school subjects. All these things in the world is built in science. All cars , buses and airplane can built the scientist . The science subjects is most important in this world science is the most powerful subjects . The science can built in every another these things .

And , the technology is the most important subjects in school . The works can full in less time can built of science and technology .

In conclusion , The science is the most important and powerful subjects in this world . And , the History is the less powerful of the science and technology. I believe that the science and technology learn the school subjects.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You attempt to discuss both views and give an opinion, so the response is relevant to the question. The history paragraph gives a personal example about Pakistan and Quaid-e-Azam, while the science and technology paragraphs mention transport and completing work more quickly. However, the discussion is minimal: the reasons are mostly asserted rather than explained, and your position is unclear because you first say History is most important, then conclude that science and technology are most important. The response contains 227 words, below the required 250; 34 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop each view with a clear explanation and example, and state one consistent opinion in the introduction and conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has separate paragraphs for History, science, technology, and a conclusion, which gives the reader a basic sense of the topics being discussed. However, ideas are not arranged into a clear, coherent progression: the opening is incomplete, the History paragraph mixes a claim with several difficult-to-follow details, and the technology paragraph is too brief to connect clearly with the science discussion. Linking words such as “And” and “In conclusion” are repeated, but they do not clarify the relationships between ideas. Use a focused introduction, organise each viewpoint into a developed paragraph, and connect claims to explanations with clear references such as “This is important because…”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “History,” “science,” “technology,” “school subjects,” and “Quaid-e-Azam,” so the reader can identify the main subject matter. However, the vocabulary is basic and highly repetitive, especially the repeated use of “most important” and “science.” Several word choices or combinations make meaning difficult to follow, such as “the less powerful of the science and technology” and “the works can full in less time.” There are also spelling and word-form problems, including “respect full” and “privences.” Build a wider set of accurate terms for explaining importance, historical influence, scientific progress, and practical benefits, and check spelling and natural word combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

You make an effort to form statements and use a few longer structures, but sentence patterns are very limited and frequent errors sometimes distort meaning. For example, “In recent years, has become say…” lacks a clear subject and a workable verb structure, while “All these things in the world is built in science” has problems with agreement and passive construction. Articles, plurals, and verb forms are also often inaccurate, as in “the History is the most important school subjects” and “The science subjects is.” These errors make several sentences hard to interpret. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add clauses using “because” or “while”; check that subjects and verbs agree and that each sentence has a complete main clause.

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