Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people believe that History is one of the most important school subject. While, others think that in today's modern world Science and technology are more important rather than History. However, both has its own prons and cons. My explanation are explain in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, Some people think that History is the most important subjects in schools as because it gives idea related to the present things including inventions that who had invented. For example, The invention of light bulb if you know the history you will understand who had invented and how it was invented and which material is used in it. In the same way from History subjects we can also know about the time which empire is largest and what kind of problems occured in past times like viruses and the cure which can help us in present and as well as in upcoming years.

Furthermore, the latter views suggest that Science and technology are more important than history because people are progressing in every field and it is very important to up-to-date the science and technology in field like medicines. For example new virus are occuring so to prevent from them science should develop new and advanced health machines to make the cure and as well as the technology building or making machines which can help people to ease the work like hactic works. For example, mining which is very dangerous for human beings advanced machineries can do it.

In conclusion, In my opinion History is important to know the basic knowledge but Science and technology will be improve the standard of living.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear preference in the conclusion: History provides useful background, while Science and technology improve living standards. The examples about the light bulb, past epidemics, medical advances, and mining machinery are relevant to the discussion. However, the two sides are not developed equally: the History paragraph lists possible benefits but does not explain in detail how studying the past helps students make decisions today, while the Science paragraph gives a clearer practical case. Your opinion is also brief and could be supported with a reason for prioritising Science and technology. Develop each main claim with a fuller explanation and a specific example to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each viewpoint, and a conclusion. Paragraphs generally stay focused, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the discussion. Cohesion is sometimes mechanical, however, and some links are unclear. For instance, “However, both has its own prons and cons” does not clearly establish the relationship between the two views, and “For example” is repeated within the Science paragraph. The long sentences also combine several points, making the progression harder to follow. Use clearer links between claim, explanation, and example, and divide multi-part sentences so each paragraph develops one main idea at a time.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “inventions,” “empire,” “medicines,” and “advanced health machines,” so the reader can understand the main ideas. However, the range and precision are limited, and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate: “up-to-date the science and technology,” “hactic works,” and “the standard of living” in this context. Spelling errors such as “prons,” “occured,” and “machineries” also reduce accuracy. Aim to learn topic-specific phrases as complete collocations and check spelling and word forms. More precise choices would help you express the contrast between historical understanding and practical technological progress without relying on repeated general terms such as “important” and “things.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including explanations with “because” and examples introduced by “if.” The main meaning is usually understandable, but some errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction remain. Examples include “one of the most important school subject,” “both has its own,” and “Science and technology will be improve.” The opening “While, others think…” is also an incomplete or incorrectly punctuated construction, and several sentences join too many clauses without clear punctuation. Review subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, and practise building complex sentences with one clear main clause. More accurate control of these forms would make your reasoning easier to follow.

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