Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, some people believe that history is the most important subjects in school. While others believe that Science and technology are more important subjects in today's world. Both subjects have their own benefits. In my opinion, both are important but science and technology should receives more attentions.

On the one hand, history is the important subjects because they teach learn us our past things like as cultural, school system, wars and food. while peoples what food use to eat and how was wearing? in past and how was education system these things we provide us knowledge. After that they provide us knowledge peoples how can fight or survive in the wars and most of the things like as provide new information.

On the other hand, science and technology are more important in today's world because the both subjects provides knowledge and information our life and future. Science helps us understand the world and technology makes us life easier and faster in future. Meanwhile the doctors do the treatment of patients and then use the technology. For examples doctors uses the new machines for the treatment of patients or do others activities use to follow the technology.

In my opinion, science and technology subjects are more important slightly in todays world because both subjects learns us in future things how can survive in future and face challenges. For example job opportunities or future plans or future facilities. But, I tell us that history me too important subjects in school they teach learn us past activities or things.

In conclusion, history and science or technology are important subjects. But from my prospective, science and technology are more important subjects in todays world because both have their many benefits in present or future and more opportunities or attentions in peoples life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both sides and state a preference for science and technology, so the response addresses the main parts of the prompt. The history paragraph gives relevant examples, including wars, food and education, while the science paragraph mentions understanding the world and medical machines. However, the position is not fully consistent: you first say both subjects are important, then that science and technology are “more important slightly,” and later return to saying history is important without clearly weighing the two. Several points remain general or unclear, such as how studying history helps students today and what specific future challenges science prepares them for. Develop fewer ideas with clearer explanations and a concrete example to make your argument more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. This makes the overall arrangement easy to follow, and signposts such as “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help distinguish the perspectives. However, progression within paragraphs is less secure. In the history paragraph, the questions about food, clothing and education are followed by “After that” and another broad point, without clear links between them. Some transitions also feel mechanical, and references such as “both subjects” can be unclear when the sentence discusses doctors and technology. Group related examples together and use linking phrases to show cause, contrast or result rather than relying mainly on set openings.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general discussion, including “cultural,” “wars,” “treatment,” “machines” and “job opportunities.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, particularly “provide us knowledge,” “future” and “subjects.” Some word choices or combinations are inaccurate and can make meaning difficult to follow, as in “history is the important subjects,” “food use to eat,” and “more attentions.” Aim for precise collocations and vary repeated terms; for example, explain that history “offers insight into past societies” rather than saying it provides knowledge. Checking word forms and spelling, including “today’s” and “perspective,” would also make the vocabulary more controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and more complex forms, including a contrast with “While others believe…” and a reason introduced by “because.” However, many sentence structures are incomplete or faulty, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to understand. For example, “While others believe that Science and technology are more important subjects in today’s world” is a fragment, and “science and technology should receives” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. Other recurring problems include articles, plurals and verb forms, as in “the important subjects,” “doctors uses,” and “both subjects learns us.” Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement and tense. More accurate control of these basic patterns is needed before adding complex clauses.

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