Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, it is topic of debate among some people that wheather history should be essencial subject in schools or science and technology. The upcoming paragraphs are going to discuss both points of views before reaching certain conclusion along with my personal opinion.
Commencing with the prior opinion, some individuals are in the favour of history because of some reasons. First and foremost reason is to get knowledge about the sacrifices done by the freedom fighters. For instance, plethora of families have lost their loved once during the freedom of India, the freedom at present time which became the right of every resident, is now possible only because of the sacrifices people done in the past. It should be taught to every student in every school that how thier nation become independant and how they become the part of this freedom. Therefore, history should be an important subject in classes for connecting the learners with their roots, with their past.
However, some are in the favour of Science and technology because they have faith that at present time every job demands basic computer skills and for getting any job, technical skills are must, hence in order to get suitable job students be into the computer skills which will be only possible if computer become the main subject. Additionally, which the passage of time many new dieseas are getting appper which can be cured if the scientists find out their formula or does more research on such topic. Thus, science and technology should be priortize in schools.
To conclude it, although every point have their relavent explanation, i believe that it should be optional for students to choose their subject accourding to their own interset.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You discuss both perspectives and give a personal view, so the response addresses the main parts of the prompt. The history paragraph offers a relevant example about India’s independence and explains how learning about past sacrifices can connect students with their roots. The case for science and technology is also relevant, particularly the need for computer skills and research into diseases. However, these points are only briefly developed, and the conclusion that subjects should be optional does not clearly explain how this resolves the debate about their relative importance. Make your position explicit earlier and support each main reason with a fuller explanation or a specific example.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, one paragraph for each viewpoint, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “However” and “To conclude” help readers follow the shift between sections, and the ideas generally progress in a sensible order. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some features of stronger progression. However, several linking phrases sound formulaic, including “The upcoming paragraphs are going to discuss” and “Commencing with the prior opinion.” Some connections within sentences are also unclear, especially “Additionally, which the passage of time,” which interrupts the flow. Use simpler, more natural transitions and make the relationship between each reason and its supporting explanation explicit.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “freedom fighters,” “technical skills,” “scientists,” and “research,” and phrases such as “connecting the learners with their roots” communicate relevant ideas. However, the range is not consistently controlled: noticeable spelling errors include “wheather,” “essencial,” “independant,” and “dieseas,” while some word combinations are unnatural, such as “the sacrifices done” and “their formula.” These errors sometimes make the reader pause, even though the general meaning is usually recoverable. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. Choosing familiar words precisely will strengthen the response more than adding ambitious expressions that do not fit the context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a conditional structure in “which can be cured if the scientists find out…”. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. Examples include “it is topic of debate,” “every point have,” and “students be into the computer skills”; these show problems with articles, agreement, and sentence construction. The long sentence beginning “Additionally” is also difficult to follow because its clauses are not joined grammatically. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause, then check articles, subject–verb agreement, and verb forms.
See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.