Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, a lot of people and students are selecting science and technology rather than history because our world sysytems have totally transferred by sociality such as educational system, activities and transportation. I will discuss both types of perspectives that extremely important for persue students career and i will give you some reasons that will support my ideas.

In the past, The history was one of the most important subject for students and people however, there are a wide variety of histories in its for example independence day, ancient animals and places, In addition, this was one of the best sources to improve our knowledge. In recent years, Sompe pewople say that, history is one of the most an vital subject in the entire world because this subject is related to our lives. For exapmle, many countries are prefer this subject with all asubjects, however their children must know about historical background.

In today, according to some people say that science and technology are one of the most important subjects, that is why, our system have became mor developed in all types of weapons and new innvative technology. I have already mentioned that many student are choosing both subjects science and technology because they know about too much information technology and science.

I think that a lot of student was select variety of subject

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You introduce the two positions and give a personal view, so the response is recognisably about the question. However, the discussion is only partial: the history paragraph mentions knowledge and historical background, while the science and technology paragraph refers to weapons and innovation, but neither view is explained or supported with a clear, relevant example. Your opinion is not developed; the final sentence, “I think that a lot of student was select variety of subject,” is incomplete and does not state which subjects you consider more important. The response also falls 27 words short of the required minimum. To strengthen the answer, state your position clearly, develop both sides with reasons and examples, and finish with a complete conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, a paragraph about history, a paragraph about science and technology, and a final opinion. This gives the reader a basic sense of the intended structure. However, progression within paragraphs is weak: ideas are often listed or repeated rather than connected and explained, and the final paragraph is only a fragment. Linking expressions such as “In addition,” “For example,” and “however” are used, but some do not show a clear relationship between the ideas they join. For instance, the contrast introduced by “however” in the history paragraph is difficult to follow. Use one clear main idea per paragraph, connect supporting details logically, and provide a complete concluding paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “historical background,” “educational system,” “transportation,” and “innovative technology.” These choices show an effort to discuss education and modern developments. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “world systems have totally transferred by sociality” and “persue students career.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “sysytems,” “Sompe,” “exapmle,” and “innvative.” Aim for accurate, natural phrases rather than complicated wording: for example, say that society has changed rapidly and that history helps students understand their country’s past. Check spelling and use topic vocabulary in clear, familiar collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including sentences beginning “because” and “however,” and the reader can identify the broad topic of each paragraph. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “our system have became,” “many countries are prefer,” and “a lot of student was select.” The final sentence is incomplete, so it cannot communicate a clear opinion. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, especially subject–verb agreement and past and present verb forms, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause. Review punctuation and sentence boundaries so each idea forms a complete sentence.

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