Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Few People say that History is one of the important subjects that should be taught in the schools whereas other people think that History is not that important as compared to Science and Technology.
On one hand, History is a very important subject as it teaches us alot of ancient culture and values, now a days the younger generation is not aware about our history, for example in India the Mughal Empire was established and have ruled for the longer period of time but the new generation is not aware about all these things, So I think even educating the youth about historical events is also very important.
On the other hand, Science and Technology also plays a very important role in the field of education as now a days most of the things are dependent on technical stuff and people are depending on it so teaching students about Science and Technology is also a very important part of our life.
As a result, In my opinion I would say that balancing of the different subjects is a very right choice for the schools or the institutions as History should be taught as it will have a great impact on the younger generations, and Science and Technology also plays a important role in our life now a days as most of the tasks and work that we do are now just dependent on technology so both of the subjects should be taught in the schools and explain about there importance in our life's.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You address both sides of the discussion and give a clear preference for teaching both subjects, so the response is relevant to the task. The example of the Mughal Empire supports the point that history can help younger people understand the past. However, the two views are not developed equally: the case for History includes an example, while the Science and Technology paragraph mainly says that people depend on technology, without explaining what students learn or how it benefits them. Your final opinion is present, but the idea of “balancing” subjects could be explained more precisely. Develop each side with a reason and a specific illustration, then make your position explicit and consistent throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a concluding opinion. Signposts such as “On one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “As a result” help readers follow the discussion. However, some sentences contain several ideas joined together, particularly the History paragraph, which moves from cultural learning to awareness among young people and then to the Mughal example without clear sentence boundaries. The conclusion also repeats points from the body rather than bringing them together concisely. Use full stops to separate related ideas, and make the link between each reason and its example explicit. This would make the progression smoother and reduce the mechanical feel of the transitions.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “historical events,” “younger generations,” and “Science and Technology,” and the meaning is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, especially “very important,” “now a days,” and “plays a very important role.” Some word choices and collocations are awkward, such as “ancient culture and values,” “technical stuff,” and “balancing of the different subjects.” These choices make parts of the response sound informal or imprecise. Aim for more specific academic phrasing and vary repeated expressions—for example, explain the particular knowledge or skills each subject provides rather than repeatedly describing it as important.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “as” and “whereas,” and the main ideas can generally be understood. However, some sentences are long and contain several clauses joined with commas, which leads to punctuation problems and makes the structure difficult to follow. There are also errors in agreement and verb forms: “Science and Technology also plays” should use a plural verb, while “the Mughal Empire … have ruled” needs a verb form that agrees with the singular subject and fits the past time reference. Articles and possessives also need attention, as in “a important role” and “our life's.” Break long sentences into shorter units and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and apostrophes during revision.
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