Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is all subject most important for student in school.but after

complete ten there are options available for student and now i am discussing about history in my up coming pharahgraph.i shell add my view

in my opinon

there is no dout study is very important for us with that i can make our future with chose good option.some people think that history is important,after read history we can know about our nation culture and our past. its very intresting subject.but few are think that now coming new tecnology in market for that they want to learn there children how they can survive in thier future if they chose science and technology releted subject then they can get better option in market and get name and fame

secondly,Histry can reminde us when happen was came in our past and when king was born and died.Every country has different history and with that we can learn just about cultural and farming with old tecnique. But now we can change our future with learning new tecnique like after getting science children can make scientest,doctors and engineer

in my opinion, govenment sould make institute for poor student which they want to do study because most of student can not afford expensive subject there is lots of kids want to get better line with that people get good future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views regarding the importance of History versus Science and Technology, but the development of these ideas is limited. The arguments are somewhat superficial, and the essay fails to reach the minimum word count of 250 words, which significantly impacts the depth of the discussion. While a personal opinion is stated, it is not well-integrated into the overall argument. The conclusion shifts focus to government funding for poor students, which is not directly relevant to the prompt's core question about the relative importance of school subjects. To improve, you should expand on your reasoning with more specific examples and ensure the essay meets the required length.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the structure is disjointed. The introduction is fragmented, and the transition between ideas is often abrupt or unclear. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and sometimes incorrect way, such as the repetitive use of 'with that' and 'secondly'. The logical progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the sentences do not flow naturally into one another. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates directly to the prompt.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'pharahgraph', 'dout', 'tecnology', and 'releted'. Some phrases are awkward or non-standard, such as 'get name and fame' or 'make scientest'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of precision and the high frequency of errors in spelling and word formation hinder the overall quality of the writing. You should focus on learning common academic collocations and proofreading your work for basic spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The grammatical range is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with frequent errors in basic syntax, verb tense, and punctuation. Examples include 'There is all subject most important', 'after read history', and 'govenment sould make'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors are pervasive enough to occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, you need to work on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and sentence construction. Practicing the use of subordinate clauses and more varied sentence patterns will help you move toward a higher band score.

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