Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

History is the study of social heritage, culture and religious. Science is the subject of different technology and it's accept. Every subject has it's own role in it's own field.

Firstly let's discuss about the history subject....

The history subject illustrates about the old social heritage, religious and cultural.In the ancient time how the society was how the country was and how the culture and religious are followed. There is a huge difference between ancient time and today's 21st generation time . We can see many different historical places like patan Durbar square, bhaktapur durbar square, basantapur Durbar square every historic place has it's own beauty and historical story.

Well, science has it's own field in the subject. Science is all about technology and in 21st century technology has played a huge role in every people daily life like we can see every people uses their own mobile phones, laptop, computer,tap etc every people are busy in their schedules technology has both negative and positive sides we can learn and innovate many different new things with the use of technology . Technology has also played the vital role in student life too. For example if we are stuck in something we can frequently get the solution of problem with the help of internet. Technology has also made our daily life routine easier and faster in comparison to ancient times.

Where as technology has also the negative point such as people are engaged in internet so bad that they forget their house hold schedule students are not interested in reading or any others different sector there are mainly engaged in playing video game and using different versions of social media side and being busy in their life.

In conclusion history and science have it's own side in subject it's better to have knowledge of both subjects.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views regarding the importance of History versus Science and Technology. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention the importance of historical sites and the utility of technology, the arguments lack depth and academic analysis. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the points made. To improve, you should provide more specific, well-reasoned arguments for why one might be considered more important than the other, rather than simply listing features of each subject. The position is present but could be more clearly articulated throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'it's own', 'technology has'). There is a lack of linking words to connect ideas within and between paragraphs, making the flow feel disjointed. For instance, the transition between the discussion of history and science is abrupt. Improving the use of transition signals such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'on the other hand' would significantly enhance the clarity and structure of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and often repetitive. You frequently use the same words, such as 'subject', 'technology', and 'important', which limits the range of your expression. There are also errors in word form and collocation, such as 'religious' used as a noun instead of 'religion' and 'it's accept' which is unclear. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary and use it more accurately. Focus on learning synonyms and collocations related to education and societal development to avoid repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'every people uses'), punctuation (missing spaces after periods), and the misuse of apostrophes (e.g., 'it's' instead of 'its'). While the meaning is generally understandable, these errors are persistent and distract the reader. To improve, you should practice using a variety of complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or conditional sentences, and pay closer attention to basic grammar rules like possessive pronouns versus contractions.

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