Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

HISTORY HAS ALWAYS BEEN CONSIDER AN ESSENTIAL SUBJECT IN SCHOOLS.HOWEVER,SOME PEOPLE ARGUE THAT SUBJECTS SUCH AS SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY ARE MORE RELAVANT IN THE MODERN WORLD.THIS ESSAY DISCUS BOTH VIWES AND EXPLAIN WHY I BELIEVE THAT SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY SHOULD BE GIVEN GREATER IMPORTANCE.

HISTORY HAS ALWAYS BEEN CONSIDERED AS ESSENTIAL SUBJECT IN SCHOOLS BECAUSE IT HELPS US UNDERSTAND WHAT HAPPEND IN THE LAST DAYS.IN PAST GOVERMENT HAS SET THE RULES AND REGULATIONS IN THE COUNRTY.NOW-A-DAYS FOLLOWED THESE RULE CAB BE CONSIDERED AS TRUTH.HISTORY HELP US TO WHO SET THESE RULES AND WHY WE WILL FOLLOW THAT REGULATIONS IN THE COUNTRY.

COMING TO SCIENCE AND INNOVATION HAS ONE OF THE BEST SUBJECT IN SCHOOLS IT ASSIST US ANALYSIS THE SITUATION AND MAKING SOLUTION WITH THE HELP OF APPLIED SCIENCE.PRESENT DAYS ALWAYS RUNS WITH TECHNOLOGY.WE WILL INTRODUCE THE NEW THINGS AND MACHINES IN THE WORLD BY SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY.

IN RECENT DAYS ALL THE WORLD RUN WITH ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCE ANDMACHINE LEARING TECHNOLOGY.

MY VIWE IS SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 167 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is significantly underdeveloped. While the essay attempts to address both views and state an opinion, the arguments regarding history are vague and repetitive, and the section on science and technology lacks specific examples or logical depth. The conclusion is incomplete, as the final sentence is cut off. Due to the severe under-length and the lack of full development of the prompt's requirements, the response is limited in its ability to fully address the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and sometimes inaccurate way, such as 'Coming to science and innovation has one of the best subject'. The referencing is often unclear, and the lack of sufficient length prevents the development of a coherent argument. The abrupt ending further disrupts the flow of the essay, making the overall structure feel incomplete and disjointed.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'RELEVANT' (written as 'RELAVANT'), 'VIEWS' ('VIWES'), 'HAPPENED' ('HAPPEND'), and 'LEARNING' ('LEARING'). The word choice is often imprecise, for example, 'last days' to refer to the past and 'run with' to describe the prevalence of technology. The student struggles to use less common vocabulary effectively, and the errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('HISTORY HAS ALWAYS BEEN CONSIDER'), incorrect verb forms ('FOLLOWED THESE RULE CAB BE CONSIDERED'), and missing articles or prepositions. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty or incomplete. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after periods throughout the text. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and demonstrate a limited control of grammatical structures.

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