Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History. This essay discuss about both views and give your own opinion.

First of all, we discuss about the history subject. History subject is necessary in school subjects. History subject gives the information about the great leaders, old kings and their life style. When the students read history subject, develop a great impact in their life. When they read about the leaders and their struggling life, a force and a great power produced in their body. They know that how their country comes into and their ancestors sacrificed. For example, when we study the Pakistani history, it gives the information about the Quaid-a- Azam struggle about the Pakistan. He sacrificed a lot of life for his nationa. And today, people know his struggles and effort for Pakistan with the help of history.

On the other hand, today the world is science and technology. The science and technology are playing essential role in our life. Without science and technology, we don't spend our life. When we see everywhere, all the things make by the help of science. In my opinion, internet is the biggest technology for human. The students use it for study, collectel the information about any thing. Furthermore, people use it in their business and use for the publicity of their products. For instance, science helps in the field of medical and agriculture. In medical, science introduced a lot of medicines and some other antibiotics that use to kill the germs. Moreover, science helps in agriculture, science introduced a mechanic that used in production of seed and then harvesting of fields.

In conclusion, both of the subjects are necessary for the students. Both give the information and knowledge of it's place. So, students should learn both subjects.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views and provides a clear opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention the importance of history for understanding national identity and science for modern convenience, the arguments lack depth and analytical complexity. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the points made. To improve, aim to provide more nuanced explanations of why these subjects are essential in a contemporary context, rather than listing general benefits. The essay covers all parts of the prompt, but the supporting examples, such as the mention of 'mechanic' for agriculture, are slightly vague and could be more precisely articulated to strengthen your position.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion. You use basic cohesive devices like 'First of all', 'On the other hand', and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, the progression between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'both give the information and knowledge of it's place'). The flow could be improved by using a wider variety of cohesive devices and ensuring that pronouns and transitions connect ideas more fluidly rather than just acting as signposts at the start of sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is often repetitive and lacks precision. You frequently use basic terms like 'subject', 'information', and 'things'. There are also some word-choice errors, such as 'collectel' (spelling) and 'mechanic' (when referring to machinery or technology). To reach a higher band, you should attempt to use more sophisticated vocabulary related to education and technology, such as 'curriculum', 'technological advancements', 'historical consciousness', or 'pedagogical value'. The current range is sufficient to convey meaning but lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher scores.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they often contain grammatical errors, such as 'This essay discuss about' (subject-verb agreement) and 'all the things make by the help of science' (passive voice error). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are frequent errors in articles and verb forms throughout the text. To improve, focus on mastering complex structures like relative clauses and conditional sentences, and pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles, which are currently inconsistent.

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