Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people thinks that the history is most important than the any subject, While some people thinks that the science and technology are more important than the history. As my opinion the science and technology is more important than the history.

As in todays modern era the science and technology leads history While some people thinks that the history is more important as it tells us about our past, about our culture our tradition, origin. And also as a Pakistani it also tells about the sacrifices that has been done by our ancestors as the people sacrifices their money, their houses, their peace etc. Just for their religion, and for their freedom from the Hindus and British.

And as in todays modern era science and technology leads history. Some people also thinks the same that the science and technology is more important than the history or any other subject as it gives you the facilities, new inventions were made, as the facilities we are using like fans, Ac’s, washing machines, the vehicles and many more is just done by the science and technology. Also the science has the main role in the medical center as it provides new medicines new surgery techniques and machineries also it makes new vaccines to overcome the viruses.

As my opinion in todays world the science and technology is more important than the history as history is just the past. It should be teach just for information and for knowledge. But the the science and technology gives us better facilities as the Ac’s and fans in our homes, schools and in our offices but in the past we don’t have any fans and ac’s and also if we study history we cannot made anything and if we study the science we can invent new items etc. also in the educational sector the science and technology leads the history.

As the science and technology leads the history some people thinks that the history is important than the science and tech but as my opinion the people that thinks the science and tech is more imp are true as it provide better facilities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive, particularly regarding the benefits of science and technology. The arguments are functional but lack depth and academic sophistication. For instance, the discussion on history is limited to cultural identity, and the argument for science focuses heavily on household appliances. To reach a higher band, you should provide more nuanced examples and explore the broader implications of these subjects in society, rather than listing items like 'fans' or 'washing machines'. The position is consistent, but the supporting arguments need more analytical weight.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'As in todays modern era' and 'As my opinion' are used frequently and sometimes incorrectly. There is a lack of variety in linking words, and the transition between ideas within paragraphs is often abrupt. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall flow is hindered by the repetitive sentence structures. Improving the use of transition signals (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'important', 'things', and 'facilities'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the science and technology leads history' and 'it should be teach'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is not sufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. You should aim to incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to the fields of education, history, and scientific advancement to enhance the sophistication of your expression.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the readability of the text. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Some people thinks', 'the science and technology is'), article usage (e.g., 'the history', 'the science'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain run-on structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, they are often marred by errors in punctuation and tense. To improve, you need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that articles are used correctly in an academic context.

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