Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In modern era, history is showing our past life, and it's show that people are how to live in the past. Therefore, group of people feel that history is the crucial subject in school days. However, other group of people are believed that in present days science and technology is more important than history. This essay will discuss both of viewpoint along, with my own opinion.
To commence with the first point of view, one of the primary positive viewpoint of school subject as history is most important compared to the science and technology. To be more precise, history preserve our culture.
Looking at, I read one historical book last night and, I very sock that this book so advance. This book idea is applied in modern days. Consequently, the history shows our past such as, some good manufacture in fast that people are live without electricity but, they live very well.
Turning to the other side of the argument a highly effective drawback is that people live in modern days, and technology is boost so, people are preferring as science and technology. To elaborate farther on this point, history preserve only past but, science and technology give good idea about future. For example, science and technology are boost but people are preserve their past so, they give focus on technology. and improve schooling technique. As a result, student are more aware about technology.
In conclusion, history is good for preserve some ancient think and it's help them to the future but, also technology as important as history so, government must be study both subject for student there are some advantage such as, people get idea about past but, some drawback like, they do not have idea about science and technology.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The essay addresses both views and provides an opinion, but the development of ideas is limited. While you mention that history preserves culture and science drives the future, the arguments lack depth and specific, logical support. For instance, the example of reading a book is too personal and does not effectively illustrate the broader societal importance of history. The conclusion is somewhat repetitive and fails to clearly synthesize your position. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by a well-explained argument and a relevant, general example rather than a personal anecdote.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow between and within sentences is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'To commence with' and 'To elaborate farther' are used, but the connections between ideas remain weak. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. To improve, focus on using transition words more naturally and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a smoother progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'good', 'important', and 'people'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'some good manufacture in fast' and 'ancient think', which hinder clarity. You attempt to use some academic vocabulary, but it is often used incorrectly or in an unnatural collocation. To reach a higher band, you should work on expanding your range of vocabulary to include more precise academic terms and collocations, and pay closer attention to word forms (e.g., using 'preservation' instead of 'preserve').
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'other group of people are believed'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are largely simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty or fragmented. For example, 'history is showing our past life' should be 'history shows us our past'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles, before attempting more complex structures.
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