Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Several Individuals believe that History is the most important school subject. Other individuals believe that at the present time subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. I am of the opinion that both History and Science and Technology have the same advantages and are equally important to our daily lives.

On the one hand, History is important in our Society because it gives us the foundations of what we have now, We are nothing today without the History from our previous ancestors who develop and fought hard during previous years. That is why it is still important to study and know the history for us to learn all the culture and values that we have from before. Additionally, while we are living everyday what we do or what happened to each person it is a history for the next generations so without giving importance to it we cannot tell to the younger generations the things that it is important. Learning history is useful for everyone each country has a different past that we can study and learn. Even in our own Country there is more to learn and to read for our better understanding.

On the other hand, Because of the modern world evolve, The technology that we have now is so different from the old ones, Right now we have eassy access to the social media we have 24/7 wi-fi. Thus children now are different from before they are adopted easily to the technology that we have right now.

In addition, theres a huge difference in terms of transportations, communications and working in a company or hospitals. it is way better today than before that is why we should also learn and study this so that we will not be having problems later on.

In conclusion, Science and Tecnology and History both correlate together they are both important and necessary. Without history we do not know the todays advantages of technology.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention the importance of history for culture and values, the explanation remains quite general. Similarly, the discussion on science and technology focuses heavily on modern conveniences like Wi-Fi and transportation rather than exploring the broader academic or societal impact. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific examples or deeper analysis of why these subjects are essential for future development. The conclusion is brief and could more effectively synthesise the arguments presented in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In addition' to signal transitions. However, the flow within paragraphs is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and punctuation errors, such as the comma splice in '...what we have now, We are nothing today...'. The use of referencing is occasionally unclear, and some sentences feel disconnected. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some relevant topic-specific terms like 'ancestors', 'modern world', and 'transportations'. However, there are instances of imprecise word choice and minor errors, such as 'eassy access' (easy) and 'they are adopted easily' (adapt). The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on common words rather than more sophisticated or academic collocations. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure correct spelling throughout your work.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement, punctuation, and sentence fragments. For example, 'Because of the modern world evolve' is grammatically incorrect, and there are several instances of run-on sentences or incorrect comma usage. The misuse of capitalisation in the middle of sentences also detracts from the professional tone. To achieve a higher score, you need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction and reducing the frequency of these recurring errors.

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