Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Science and technology has rapidly developed over the past decades and became the most important subjects. While some people agree with this view, other believe that history is the most important subject in school. This essay will examine compelling arguments of the both perspectives before arriving at a will-reasoned conclusion.
As we all know that science and technology has seen a major developments science 1900 and our life is practically dependent with science and technology so every students must have proper knowledge about it. Everything around us is somehow related to science and most of work is depend on technology with the proper education of science and technology students can have a clear understanding of basics of the world. In fact most of my friends from my institutes agree with this view, they all give less importance to history as a subject.
Others, on the other hand, argued that the even after the development of other fields is most significant but our history will remain the most important subject because history teaches us the past and the importance of our identity. It teach us about the
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, as it is only 186 words long. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the essay is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence. While you attempt to address both views, the arguments are under-developed and lack sufficient supporting examples. The conclusion is missing entirely. To improve, you must ensure you fully explore both perspectives with detailed explanations and provide a clear, well-supported personal opinion. The current length prevents a full response to the prompt, which is a major constraint on your score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some basic logical organization, with an introduction and separate paragraphs for each viewpoint. However, the progression is interrupted by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are used in a somewhat mechanical way, such as 'As we all know' and 'Others, on the other hand'. The lack of a conclusion and the abrupt ending make the overall structure feel disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by fully developed supporting points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on simple, repetitive phrasing such as 'most important subjects' and 'science and technology'. There are some errors in word choice, such as 'dependent with' instead of 'dependent on' and 'will-reasoned' instead of 'well-reasoned'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to the topic of education and history, while ensuring you use them accurately in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'Science and technology has' (subject-verb agreement error), 'most of work is depend on' (incorrect verb form), and 'the even after' (unnecessary article). Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Practice writing complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions like 'although' or 'whereas' to demonstrate better control over your grammatical range.
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