Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In modern society, the significance of History subjects at school is heatedly debated. Some individuals suggest that it is more significant of students to learn subjects like Science and technology. While I believe both subjects are equally vital for students.
On the one hand, science and technology helps a country to develop. With students learning about technology a country can acquire more human resource. This allows a country to advanced in technology. in this way a country be competitive globally. In addition, students could have low risk of unemployment. Whereas, a history students may experience the risk of job insecurity.
Having said that History subject is hot without its own advantages.
On the other hand, learning about history helps juveniles to acquire more knowledge about their country and a sense of national pride. They can be confident about their own culture. Meanwhile students can learn about their tradition and culture. Additionally, students can acquire experience from the past generations in which students can turn into perious life experience.
In conclusion, although technology bring a secure in occupation and development of a country. It is equally important for students to learn about their culture and history of their initial generations.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 199 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the arguments remain superficial and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. While you address both views and state an opinion, the brevity prevents a fully developed discussion. To improve, you must expand on your points by providing specific examples or deeper explanations for why science or history is important. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not effectively synthesize the arguments presented.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a basic attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'In addition', and 'In conclusion'. However, the flow is sometimes mechanical, and the transition between ideas is occasionally abrupt. For instance, the sentence 'Having said that History subject is hot without its own advantages' is confusing and lacks a clear connection to the previous paragraph. Improving the variety and precision of linking words would help the essay flow more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'important', 'significant', and 'good'. There are also some awkward word choices, such as 'perious life experience' (which is unclear) and 'secure in occupation'. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use more sophisticated collocations and precise academic vocabulary. For example, instead of 'a country can acquire more human resource', you could use 'a nation can cultivate a highly skilled workforce'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'science and technology helps' (subject-verb agreement), 'a country be competitive' (missing auxiliary verb), and 'technology bring a secure' (subject-verb agreement). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentence fragments and run-on structures. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and a finite verb.
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