Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There are many people say History is most important subject in school and other people believe that today's world subjects such as Science and technology are important than

History.

To begin with, some people believe that History subject is the one of the most important in school because students learn history about many things. teachers learning to pupils about the history of past things like, some popular places, famous people and also many more thing to learn and students increasing their general knowledge. moreover, This to knowledge is a very useful in our life and develop more people to learn. History is a enjoyable subject.

Secondly, some people think that Science and technology are more important subject than History. Today's generation are use many technology in their life and technology is a important in our daily life. Science is a very helpful subject for students because they are achieve their goal in life and also, develop their ability and creativity. many students become a doctor, engineer, pilot because of the science and technology subject. they are built their own life and successful career. they have been achieved goal and improve their ability. So basically Science and technology is a important subject in school. For instance, one of my friend is a good doctor because of this subject.

In conclude, In my opinion, sometimes History subject is a important for students to get more knowledge but other side Science and technology subject are more important in today's world. people need to technology every time and every where.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments for History are vague, relying on repetitive phrases like 'learn history about many things' without specific examples. The arguments for Science and technology are slightly better developed with the mention of career paths like 'doctor' or 'engineer', but the explanation remains superficial. To reach a higher band, you need to provide more depth and specific, logical reasoning for why these subjects are important in a modern context, rather than simply stating they are 'helpful' or 'enjoyable'.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. For example, 'This to knowledge' is an unclear reference, and the transition 'In conclude' is non-standard. The progression of ideas within paragraphs is often repetitive, such as the repeated mention of 'Science and technology' as a 'subject' in every sentence of the second body paragraph. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to previous nouns would significantly improve the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. You frequently use basic terms like 'important', 'things', and 'good'. There are also issues with word formation and collocation, such as 'teachers learning to pupils' (should be 'teachers teach pupils') and 'they are achieve their goal'. To improve, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to education and technology, and practice using synonyms to avoid repeating the same words throughout the essay. Expanding your range of adjectives and verbs will help convey your points more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('There are many people say'), article usage ('the one of the most important'), and tense consistency ('they are built their own life'). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty, such as 'Today's generation are use many technology'. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of auxiliary verbs, before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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