Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

According to my experience from everyday observation, today, the world most popular subjects is Science and Technology are mainly vital rather than History because of a lot of filed in these subjects.

The History lesson related to our culture, independence day and also ancient story.

In this essay, I will discuss the two views about subject is History and Science and technology, these are subjects played an important role in our lives.

Firstly, if I examine all the countries, there are all subjects are equal for expanding knowledge such as Canada, America, and Australia.

According to other people say that, the history is one of the most significant subject as there are a lot of countries information in this subject like Historical festivals, cultural and importance of celebration days.

On the other hand, other say that, we must need to know about extinction animals and also place for example big cats and danasor, and Mon jo daro through this subject.

In the many countries, all education levels are concerns both subjects because of historical movements

such as Brazil, Italy, and almost South Africa.

On the other hand, other think people say that in current world subjects are Science and technology, there are many fields for instance, Software engineering, chemistry and biology etc.

Today many people are selecting this subject because go abroad for higher educations.

According to my point of view, these subjects give the information about our surrounding things like that trees nature and also environment.

in conclusion, this essay the other say that about subjects.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views, but the development is inconsistent and often unclear. While you mention both History and Science/Technology, the arguments are fragmented and lack logical depth. For example, the paragraph discussing History mentions 'extinction animals' and 'danasor' (dinosaurs), which are not typically associated with the study of History in an academic context. Furthermore, your position is not clearly maintained throughout the essay; the conclusion is incomplete and fails to summarize your stance effectively. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and provides well-reasoned support rather than just listing examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'On the other hand', they are often used incorrectly or do not logically connect the sentences. For instance, the transition between discussing History and Science is abrupt, and the final conclusion is a sentence fragment that does not provide a sense of closure. The referencing is also unclear at times, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single, coherent idea would significantly improve your score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which occasionally impedes communication. You rely on basic terms and struggle with word choice, such as 'filed' instead of 'fields' and 'danasor' instead of 'dinosaurs'. There are also issues with collocation, such as 'subjects played an important role', which should be 'subjects play an important role'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that words are used in the correct context. Expanding your range of synonyms and practicing correct word forms will help you express your ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often make the meaning difficult to grasp. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'today, the world most popular subjects is Science'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'In the many countries, all education levels are concerns both subjects because of historical movements'. While you attempt some complex structures, they are generally faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors like missing prepositions and incorrect verb tenses.

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