Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In recent year ,the development of our life and technology make us to upgrade our study level in the basis of this statement some individual believe that the history subject should be more prioritize in the academic schools whereas other people think science and technology is the crucial topic and subject to be studied in today's generations. This essay will be discuss both sides of views in details and draw a conclusions.
On the first hand , nowadays there is lots of subjects has been apply in academic schools like Mathematics ,English ,Social etc .History is also one of the most important subject should be applied in our academic school because history allows us to know about the past events ,people and civilizations .history helps to build sense of responsibility which makes us more helpful to understand the struggle and achievement of previous generations and helps us to become more better citizens. for instant a years ago when covid enter in our country people used to neglect and roaming outside because of that they outbreak more dramatically and caused a large numbers of death so now we know how to get prevented from it .
On the other hand , nowadays science and technology has been seen prioritized from people more than history because in this modern world and generation everything has became more digital and advanced .For instant , in big sectors like company ,hospital ,bank and others faculty where this technology and science are more important. Studying about science and technology supports in agriculture sectors by producing modern tools and technology which helps to increased agricultural production .
in conclusion , despite both have some many importance and own benifits like history let us know about the past events and incident and helps to enhanced sense of responsibility whereas science and technology are most important for our modern generation to survive it contribute different kind of tools and products . I believe that science and technology should be more important for study rather than history
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt by discussing the arguments for history and for science and technology, and clearly states a personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. The position is maintained throughout the essay. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the example provided for history attempts to use the COVID-19 pandemic, but the explanation is confusingly linked to past historical events, resulting in an illogical illustration. Ideas are presented but remain under-developed rather than fully extended with strong, relevant examples. Nevertheless, all core requirements of the task are met, corresponding to Band 6.0 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing, separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Basic cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the first hand', 'On the other hand', and 'in conclusion'. However, referencing and cohesion are frequently faulty or mechanical. For example, 'On the first hand' is non-standard phrasing, and logical transitions between sentences can be abrupt. Paragraph internal progression is hindered by run-on sentences and punctuation issues, making the flow somewhat disjointed. Overall, the organizational structure is adequate for a Band 5.5, showing elements of both Band 5 and Band 6.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, attempting less common items such as 'prioritize', 'civilizations', and 'agricultural production'. However, there are frequent word choice and collocation errors, such as 'the history subject should be more prioritize', 'dramatically' used instead of a noun or adjective, and spelling errors like 'benifits'. Word forms are often inaccurate (e.g., 'help to increased', 'draw a conclusions'). These inaccuracies do not entirely impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writing exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, though complex structures are frequently faulty. There are persistent errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation. Examples include 'In recent year ,the development... make us to upgrade', 'there is lots of subjects has been apply', and missing capitalisation at the beginning of sentences and after full stops. Punctuation errors are particularly noticeable with spaces incorrectly placed before commas. While the meaning remains mostly clear despite these frequent errors, the density of grammatical mistakes keeps the score at Band 5.0.
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