Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects, weather other think that today's world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Overall, the most of the people says that History is one of the most important school subject like Social, to enhance improve skills nevertheless some other people think that today's world subjects like Science and Technology are more important than history.

To begin with history is one of the most important to learn children they had some enhance on the history also with they have to learn today's subjects like science and technology those two are important in their roles, some schools The lecture was very informative and helped me understand the history better, A good example with history important in law the students can learn more about history however it useful in the competivite exams so in the schooling it is the one of the subject for students it was in the high school students in their primary they studied about science.

To Finish with, today's world subjects like Science and technology are more they both are used for enhance the world or country today's technology was rise day by day the students who are learning day by day technology they are getting job's and become a higher positions like CEO and manager technology used for only private organizations not for the government, A good example with Science is used for doctor role, Technology is used for Engeerning role, this two subjects are important who are in private company.

In conclusion, history was important for government occupation not more than technology and science but the people know about history a basic knowledge it can useful any time and any where mostly independence day and republic day people know about history for freedom fighters who are fight for the country or nation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views required by the prompt regarding the importance of history versus science and technology, and a personal opinion is presented, albeit rather weakly near the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited and often obscured by linguistic issues. For instance, the writer mentions that history helps in 'competitive exams' and law, and science and technology are used for 'doctor role' and 'engineer role,' but these points remain under-developed and lack clear, extended supporting examples. Phrases like 'history was important for government occupation not more than technology and science' show an attempt to address the prompt, but the overall position lacks consistent clarity and depth. Consequently, the performance aligns best with the Band 5 descriptors, as the task is addressed only partially with limited, under-developed ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the overall organization suffers from a lack of clear progression and logical flow. Sentences often appear disconnected or run together without appropriate transitions, such as the sudden shift within the third paragraph from children learning history to 'The lecture was very informative and helped me understand the history better,' which feels out of place in an essay context. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as the frequent reliance on 'day by day' or 'to begin with' and 'to finish with.' Paragraphing is attempted, but internal coherence is frequently broken by confusing referencing and abrupt topic shifts, placing this text firmly at Band 4.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and spelling that frequently impede communication. Examples of inaccurate lexical choices include 'weather other think' (whether others think), 'competivite exams' (competitive exams), and 'Engeerning role' (engineering profession). The writer attempts less common vocabulary such as 'CEO' and 'independent day,' but the control over word formation and collocation is weak. There are frequent errors in word forms (e.g., 'job's' with an unnecessary apostrophe, 'higher positions' instead of senior positions). Because the vocabulary range is limited and noticeable errors cause difficulty for the reader, a Band 4 score is appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatically, the essay demonstrates a very limited range of structures. Simple sentences are poorly controlled, and attempts at complex or compound sentences invariably result in faulty syntax, run-on sentences, and severe punctuation errors. For example, the sentence starting with 'To begin with history is one of the most important to learn children...' contains multiple clauses fused together incorrectly without proper punctuation or conjunctions. Subject-verb agreement errors are common, such as 'the most of the people says' and 'history was important.' Frequent errors distort meaning and place a heavy burden on the reader to decipher the intended message. Therefore, the grammatical accuracy and range correspond to Band 4.

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