Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

I am here give my opnion about ths topic rather than anyone assmuption or his idea about this

first we define what is history - the things which are done in past are know as history i think for schools students history must be known beause they should know what happend in the history who are the rules, who invented this , that and so many and also science is also important because every thing is happening in that world his science.

according this condtion or genaetion absolutely science are more important beause the technology has grown up and we should ajdust this society and students need science more than history because they are the ext geneartions to buid technlogies and take over the country to developed country with history knowledge its not enough it only gives ideas but leaning science gives a partical for inventiong new things

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to discuss both history and science, offering a brief personal opinion that science is more important in today's technology-driven world. However, the ideas are severely underdeveloped due to the extremely short length of the text, containing only 148 words, which falls well short of the 250-word minimum requirement. The prompt asks to discuss both views and give an opinion, which is touched upon, but the arguments lack the necessary extension, support, and depth expected for an academic essay. Because the length requirement is not met, the task achievement is heavily penalised, placing it at the lower end of the scale.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers from a major lack of proper structural organisation and paragraphing. The response is written as a single, continuous block of text without clear transitions between the introduction, body arguments, and conclusion. While the writer attempts to use sequential markers like 'first' and 'according this condtion', cohesive devices are applied mechanically and inadequately. Paragraphing is entirely absent, which heavily disrupts the logical flow and progression of ideas. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and limited in range, including numerous fundamental word-choice errors such as 'opnion', 'assmuption', and 'ext geneartions'. The writer attempts some topic-related vocabulary like 'technology', 'inventiong', and 'history knowledge', but these attempts are marred by poor spelling and inappropriate collocations, such as 'learning science gives a partical'. The lexical resource is minimally adequate for basic communication, but the high frequency of spelling mistakes and restricted vocabulary prevent the response from achieving a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The writing consists almost entirely of poorly punctuated run-on sentences joined by commas rather than proper conjunctions or full stops (e.g., 'history must be known beause they should know what happend in the history who are the rules...'). There is an almost complete absence of accurate complex structures, and basic grammatical rules regarding verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles are frequently neglected. Frequent errors in grammar and punctuation constantly strain the reader and hinder clarity.

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