Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Many years ago,peple were being tought all kind of subjects. but lifesyle have changed significantly alot of new subjects abered like technology and others. this essay will focus on the subjects that need to be tought at schools.

firstly, all sorte of subjects are important and some how play a crucial part in buliding new generations able to deal with all kind of proplames and sbjects like science make a big difference and alawes yonge peple to tink in more benifacial ways and creat useful soultion for diffrent sections while on the other hands technology make un important role in the world development which is on of the essantial prograss in near future and can help leading and controle the world.whit knowlage and progress to illustreate new technology will make the future more easer and more develope.

further more, subjects such as histore plays essancial part in helping the youth from losting thire hirtag and the past mationes which creat the future right now and the nicent genration achive the most significant progress. more over other subjects beside history are also important and must be tought at schools for better and understandabel yoth.for example if the student get to learn the past this will make them more whileing to keep it and save thire grandpearnts inhirtag.

in conclusion, i belive that all sort of subjects must tought at school to creat a nationes full of intallegent and cerative peolpe. also we need to be sure that we maneage the development and not forgete the acinte

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address both views regarding the importance of history versus science and technology, and gives a personal opinion in the conclusion stating that all sorts of subjects must be taught. However, the development of ideas is limited and hindered by severe language barriers. The arguments are presented in a very generalized manner without deep elaboration. For instance, the mention of science making a 'big difference' and technology playing 'un important role' lacks specific, well-supported examples. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the lack of fully extended ideas places this response at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 for addressing the core prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are heavily compromised. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, relying heavily on run-on sentences and basic connectors like 'firstly', 'further more', and 'in conclusion'. There is a lack of clear referencing; for example, pronouns like 'it' and 'this' are frequently ambiguous in their antecedents. Sentences often bleed into one another without proper punctuation, making it difficult to follow the progression of thought. This fits the Band 4 descriptor where information and ideas are not arranged coherently.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is basic and limited, with pervasive spelling errors that heavily strain the reader throughout the text. Words such as 'peple' (people), 'tought' (taught), 'lifesyle' (lifestyle), 'abered' (appeared), 'sorte' (sort), 'buliding' (building), 'proplames' (problems), 'sbjects' (subjects), 'alawes' (allows), 'yonge' (young), 'benifacial' (beneficial), 'soultion' (solution), 'easer' (easier), 'histore' (history), 'hirtag' (heritage), 'mationes' (nations), 'nicent' (ancient), 'whileing' (willing), 'inhirtag' (inheritance), 'intallegent' (intelligent), and 'acinte' (ancient) demonstrate severe spelling deficiencies. The range of vocabulary is minimal and repetitive, meeting the criteria for Band 4 where errors frequently strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text consists almost entirely of flawed simple and complex sentences, plagued by missing punctuation, run-on structures, and frequent errors in basic tense and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'peple were being tought', 'lifesyle have changed', 'subjects that need to be tought'). There is a complete lack of sentence boundaries in places, creating massive run-on blocks of text. Punctuation is largely ignored, which severely impedes readability. These pervasive errors in basic grammar and structure align firmly with Band 4.

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