Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Both people are right in own case, there are many reason in the History and Science technology. I beleave that Histiory life is good for the old people and the now geranation is called new technology is good.

First of all, old History people live in the cave, wear the skin of the animals on the body. Second of all, people is simple but they are honest for the other people and the every thing is available for this. People was washing the body in the canale. They was slept peaceful and good.

Other of hand, the new technology in the nowadays is many banefits for the now people . First of all, new technology in the many faculities such as education sectors, shopping mall, hospitals, police satation and the other theng. This is all thing is useful for the now people. Secound of all, science lab , computer lab, Bio lab and the library. If the old person come in the world they again died because of see this things. Last 20 years old peolpe dead because of the shorter of treatment. This is useful for the person. Now the students are study in different schools. The young people works in the different campanies.

To sum up, I am own opinion in the statements that the science and new technology is useful for the now people and my agree in the science technology.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response addresses both views regarding the importance of history versus science and technology, and attempts to provide a personal opinion at the beginning and end. However, the development of ideas is extremely limited and simplistic, focusing on vague generalisations such as old people living in caves and washing in canals. Furthermore, the response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, containing only 234 words. This under-length impacts the overall task achievement, as the arguments lack necessary depth and extension. Consequently, the performance aligns closely with the Band 4 descriptors, where the task is responded to only minimally and ideas are under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by incoherent sentences and poor transitions, such as 'Other of hand, the new technology in the nowadays is many banefits'. Cohesive devices are either misused or overly repetitive, relying heavily on basic sequencing words like 'First of all' and 'Second of all'. Referencing is also unclear in places, such as pronouns not clearly pointing to their antecedents. Overall, while the text attempts an arrangement of ideas, the lack of clear progression and faulty cohesion firmly place this response at Band 4.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice and spelling errors that strain the reader's understanding. Examples of errors include 'Histiory' for history, 'geranation' for generation, 'canale' for canal, 'banefits' for benefits, and 'faculities' for facilities. The student attempts to use some topic-related terms like 'education sectors', 'shopping mall', and 'hospitals', but the limited range and persistent spelling errors impede clear communication. This profile matches Band 4, where vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and errors frequently strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and frequently faulty sentence structures. There are persistent errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and tense usage throughout the response, such as 'there are many reason in the History', 'People was washing', 'They was slept', and 'my agree in the science technology'. Complex structures are rarely attempted, and when they are, they contain severe errors that distort meaning and cause significant difficulty for the reader. These numerous and frequent grammatical inaccuracies correspond to the Band 4 level.

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