Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Lots of advancement have came across and seen in Education sectors. for instance Science and technology. infront of these other subjects like history hides in shadow of prominent and demanding subjects.

They are two school of thoughts highlights two different opinions that are fallows: 1. the subject of History has great value and importance.2. Science and technology are more important than History.

Both views are absolutely right and Hundred percent correct. Every subject has its own value and importance . the subject of history should tought in the schools so that they get familiar with the past events. they should know the crusial happenings of early centuries. History helps students to learn about their culture and religion. for instance many times i feel confusion about the events of Madina and Makkah.to clear that purpose i went through the islamic history books.

However the importance of Sceice and technology should not be ignored. they should be tought to students in regular intervals so that they can learn and explore the new techniques.As this is moderen era of advancement .new developments are happening: in this regard subject of science and technology should be tought from grade one to onwards.

From early stage students get easily familar with these subjects .they will get to know how to cope with difficultieswhile performing the practical tasks.

to conclude i would suggest that all subjects have their own value and class.they should be tought to students with all the perioty.so that students get benefits f

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address both sides of the prompt—the importance of history versus science and technology—and provides a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on history mentions learning about the past and culture, and the personal example regarding Islamic history adds some relevance, but the arguments remain rather basic. Furthermore, the task requires a minimum of 250 words, and this response falls slightly short at 249 words, which results in a penalty under the length requirement rule. Consequently, the task has been only partially developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The overall organisation of the essay shows some structural awareness, attempting an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, paragraphing and punctuation are severely disrupted throughout the text, with missing capitalisation, abrupt transitions, and unconventional numbering in the introduction. Cohesive devices are minimal or inaccurate, such as the sudden shift using 'However' and 'to conclude'. There is no clear logical progression between sentences, and referencing is frequently unclear, making the flow difficult to follow at times. This corresponds to a lower band for organisation and cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily impacted by numerous spelling and word-choice errors. Examples include 'advancement have came', 'infront', 'fallows', 'tought', 'crusial', 'moderen', 'familar', and 'perioty'. While the writer attempts some less common terms like 'prominent', 'techniques', and 'practical tasks', the high frequency of lexical and spelling inaccuracies impedes communication and limits the range of vocabulary to a minimally adequate level for basic expression.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, relying heavily on simple sentence forms and repetitive structures. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, characterised by severe punctuation errors, missing capital letters, and poor subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Lots of advancement have came', 'subject of history should tought'). Punctuation is largely neglected, with sentences running together or starting without proper capitalization. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from achieving a higher band score.

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