Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

It is an ongoing debate on the subject of the school, as some people believe that history is one of the most important school subjects, but others believe that in today's world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. I firmly believe that both subjects are equally important for students in school.

On the one hand, some people believe that history is one of the most important subjects in school because it tells about the old cultures, traditions, and facts of any particular country, and it is very important to know about these things,e it also gives knowledge about the previous fighters who fought for the countries rights which will ignite the feeling of nationalism

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You state a clear opinion—that History and science/technology are equally important—and begin to explain the value of History through culture, traditions, and knowledge of people who fought for their country. However, the response addresses only part of the task: it does not explain the opposing view about science and technology, and the supporting point about History is left unfinished. The response contains 98 words, so it is 152 words short of the required minimum; 20 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from that count. This leaves the position and ideas minimally developed. To improve, discuss both views, support each with a relevant example, and explain why you consider the subjects equally important.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening introduces the debate and your opinion, followed by a paragraph beginning “On the one hand” to present one side. This gives the reader some sense of direction. However, the response ends before the argument progresses to the other view or a conclusion, so the overall organisation is incomplete. The opening sentence also joins several ideas with “as” and “but,” making the relationship between them somewhat cumbersome. Develop a clear sequence of paragraphs—introduction, each viewpoint, and conclusion—and use linking phrases to show how each point relates to your position. Ensure each paragraph has a complete central idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “cultures,” “traditions,” “previous fighters,” and “feeling of nationalism,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There is some repetition of “subjects” and “important,” while several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “the subject of the school” and “tells about the old cultures.” The phrase “previous fighters” is also not the most natural way to describe people who fought for a country. Aim for more precise academic collocations and vary repeated words. For example, you could refer to “the school curriculum,” say History “provides insight into past cultures,” and describe “historical figures who fought for independence.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a mixture of sentence forms, including a complex opening with “as” and a reason clause introduced by “because.” The main ideas can usually be understood, but control is uneven. In “it is very important to know about these things,e it also gives knowledge,” the punctuation is faulty and the sentence runs together; the final clause also lacks a clear ending. “For the countries rights” needs a possessive form, and the long opening sentence would be clearer if divided into shorter, controlled sentences. Practise accurate sentence boundaries, possessives, and punctuation while retaining some complex structures. Completing each sentence before adding another point will make your argument easier to follow.

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