Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is often argued by some people that history is one of the important subject in school because, it helps children know about worlds famous charachter. Meanwhile, others believe that science and technology become most popular in modern word. As, it helps children knowing about modern technology like IT fields and other computer related course. However, in my opinion science and technology is best and more important in today's wold subject because it helps new generation to get a job easily and comfortably.
On the one hand, supporters of history subject believe that childrens have an opportunity to know more about history and wolds famous charachters and buildings.Take an example of Japan, where majority of schools added a history subject in their syllabus. As, children are able to learn more about history. Thus, the supporters of this view support their finding back their analysis with valid arguments.
While on the other hand, the advocates of the view that science and technology are more important that history believes that it helps children learn more about modern technology. As, every thing is made of modern science and technology and it also helps children to get high ranked job.
However, in my opinion science and technology is very benificial for new generation because everything is made of new technology and nowadays the scope of science and technology is increased rapidly and it also helpful in future.
To sum up, even though the subject of hsitory is not considerd well in nowadys technology because every thing is online, but i believe that science and technology become most popular and i hope the scope of this field is very high in future
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You discuss both perspectives and state a clear preference for science and technology, especially in the introduction and conclusion. However, the response only partially develops the task: the case for history is mainly that students can learn about famous people and buildings, while the case for science focuses on technology and employment. These points are relevant, but they need explanation and specific support. The Japan example is asserted rather than showing what students gain from studying history, and the claim that science helps people get a job “easily and comfortably” is not explained. Develop each side with a clear reason and a concrete example, and make your final comparison more precise so your position is consistently supported.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several linking expressions are repetitive or awkward. “On the one hand” is followed by “While on the other hand,” and several sentences begin with “As,” without forming clear connections to the preceding ideas. The conclusion also introduces the unclear claim that history is “not considerd well” because everything is online. Use fewer, more accurate transitions and make each paragraph develop one main point through explanation and an example. Clearer links between claims would make the organisation more coherent.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “syllabus,” “modern technology,” “supporters,” and “scope,” so the reader can identify the main subject of each paragraph. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “science and technology,” “children,” and “modern.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “charachter,” “wold,” “benificial,” and “high ranked job,” which reduce precision and sometimes make the wording difficult to interpret. Some combinations are unnatural, including “support their finding back their analysis.” Build a more accurate range for discussing education, historical understanding, and career opportunities, and check spelling and collocations carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “because” and “where,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, control is inconsistent, and errors occur frequently in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “science and technology is” should use a plural verb, while “supporters … believes” has a subject–verb agreement error. “It helps children knowing” also uses an incorrect verb pattern. Several sentences are fragments or awkwardly joined, such as “As, children are able to learn more about history.” Practise building complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check agreement and verb patterns when revising. More accurate control of these structures would make your ideas easier to follow.
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