Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people say Histroy is one of the important school subjects. While other argue that science and tecnology are more important in today's world. Although both subjects have there own benefits. In future Science and tecnology are important , but his past is also essentiaol for every indivisual, to know about your histroy .

On the one hand histroy play's an importanat role in education because its help students understand the past and leran from previous mistakes, and in the histroy, we will know about our accient civilzation, what people do in the past ,what was his activites, how they will see the world and also how do people work in daily rotines and the most important thing ,what people do for living. How they treat her patients. In anciante time How people make food, and how they make a fire to prepare some food ,Also on the past' who was the dectetor and many more other people like Governer , Primr minister, this nessuray for every person to know there Histroy.

On the other hand science and technology is most important' for every person from every were, because in the future , if the person have idea about the [IT]. they will be good in future.

Science and techology is the only thing ,which make our life easy and safe. In hospital there is a lot's of patient's ,which treatment is only possible from science and technology.

History is one of the most important acadmaic subjects, which is neccesary in every where, but science and technology; is most compulsory school subjects, which give us , a lot's of information our daily life routines

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You discuss both sides: History is linked to learning from past mistakes and understanding earlier societies, while Science and technology are presented as useful for modern life and medical treatment. Your final paragraph also signals that both subjects matter. However, the position is not fully clear: the opening says Science and technology are important in the future, but later calls History essential, and the conclusion describes both as important without directly deciding which view you support. Several points remain general or unclear, such as the reference to having an idea about IT. Develop each side with a specific explanation or example, then state and maintain a clear opinion throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall structure, with an opening, separate paragraphs beginning “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a concluding statement. These markers help readers identify the two views. However, progression within paragraphs is weak: the History paragraph moves through ancient civilisations, daily routines, food, fire, and political leaders without grouping or explaining how each point supports the argument. Some links are also unclear, and the final paragraph repeats earlier claims rather than drawing them together. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, explain it, and add a relevant example. Use referencing and linking phrases carefully so the relationships between ideas are clear rather than relying mainly on repeated transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “previous mistakes,” “civilisation,” “treatment,” and “science and technology,” so the reader can identify the subject of the essay. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “important” and “in the past.” Frequent spelling errors—such as “Histroy,” “tecnology,” and “essentiaol”—and imprecise expressions such as “idea about the [IT]” sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Aim to use a wider set of accurate terms for historical learning and modern applications, and check spelling carefully. Prefer precise, natural collocations over broad claims such as “make our life easy and safe.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer structures, including the opening contrast with “While” and the explanation beginning “because,” but control is inconsistent. Several sentences are fragments, such as “Although both subjects have there own benefits,” and the opening “While other argue…” is not joined to a complete main clause. Agreement and verb forms are also frequently inaccurate: “history play’s,” “its help,” and “science and technology is” need correction. Punctuation is often misplaced, with spaces before commas and long strings of ideas joined without clear sentence boundaries. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, tense, articles, and punctuation. More accurate simple and compound sentences would make your ideas easier to understand.

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