Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people thought that history subject is very important for us to make ourself aware of the surrounding environment.and some other student or people say think that in todays era subjects like science and technology are the most important part of modern era because they think these subject give them more advantages in achieving good life style . because those subject give a best oppertunities that move them towards a successful life ever.

Both these opinion the correct with their aspects, because every person has its own point of view in everything matter happend in their life.

I also prefer those people those think that todays world subjects like science and technology has better or important to achieved their better living standard than reading or learning history books, but these all are books I like reaing books this increase our thinking and makes us fell pleasure.

I have some real examples of my fellows who think like those person that believe history is the most important subject than science subjects,its all depends on their interest some people have different thought that science and technology are more benifical than reading history at school level.

I saw a girl who become a scientist after a studing history master, and the one who become a great reader,officer after keeping hard work in his life. So,both profections are great with their own aspects.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify both viewpoints and state a preference for science and technology, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion is only minimal: the claimed benefits of these subjects are described generally as helping people achieve a “successful life,” while the case for studying history is not explained beyond personal interest and reading. The examples about a girl becoming a scientist after studying history and someone becoming a reader or officer are unclear and do not show how either subject supports the argument. Your position also becomes less definite when you conclude that both professions are great. The response is 21 words below the required minimum, and the limited development leaves important parts of the task insufficiently addressed. Explain each view with a clear reason and a specific, relevant example, then reinforce your own position in the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs for the opening, your opinion, and examples, which gives it some basic organisation. There is also an attempt to connect ideas with phrases such as “Both these opinion” and “So.” However, the progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs do not develop distinct, clearly ordered arguments. The third paragraph mixes a preference for science with a personal liking for books, and the final examples do not clearly connect to the claims they are meant to support. Repeated references such as “those people” and “those subjects” also make it hard to identify exactly who or what is meant. Organise the essay around one paragraph for each viewpoint, followed by a clear opinion, and use precise references and linking phrases to show how each example supports its point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “surrounding environment,” “science and technology,” “advantages,” and “living standard.” This gives you a basic range for discussing education and future prospects. However, vocabulary is often repetitive or imprecise, and several word combinations are unnatural, such as “achieving good life style,” “a best opportunities,” and “both profections.” Spelling errors, including “oppertunities,” “benifical,” and “reaing,” also reduce accuracy and can distract the reader. Aim to use familiar words accurately before reaching for more elaborate expressions. Learning topic-specific collocations such as “career prospects,” “historical understanding,” and “scientific knowledge” would help you express your ideas more precisely and naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a sentence beginning “because they think these subject give them more advantages.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but control of sentence structure is inconsistent, and many sentences contain errors that make the meaning harder to follow. For example, “Both these opinion the correct” lacks a clear verb and has an incorrect plural form, while “every person has its own point of view” has problems with agreement and pronoun reference. Verb forms and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “who become a scientist after a studing history master.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, checking singular/plural agreement, articles, and tense. Use full stops to separate ideas rather than joining several clauses with commas.

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