Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In today,s world history is the major subject of the education in the school and colleges and most of the regional and cultural individuals point of view is must need to learn the past history of his regions they conduct positive results on his degree. One of the rose benefit for the students they knew it where they came from.

On the other side most of the peoples preffer to modern education because nest becoming world will be artificial intelligence so its importane subjects for the students. In science and technology is gives positive results in the country vicinity. On time when most of the students done is degree in science and technoloy after that they going in different fields for exaples, doctors, constructer, scientist.

From my perspectives way modern education is more beneficial for the one country. when they faces the critical factors in country so those students help in this situation. Most of the doctor are served his time in hospitals to protect the human life, and others engineers builds emporiums colleges, so roads are on and of packed here.

For example, when the covid 19 is spred all over the world in 2019 and thousands of individuals are died on this time and all the countries passing the critical condition. On that time scientist doing his gob and created the antidote for covid 19 furthermore, after when medicine is comes they saved the world peoples.

In conclusion, science and technology is the crucial part on that time in every country. Due to this possibile of science technology nine countries are becoming nucler power. Additional they reached at the space and collected the data from it for his cumminity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall preference for science and technology, and you include relevant examples such as doctors treating patients and scientists developing a COVID-19 vaccine. You also mention why history matters: it helps students understand their origins and regional culture. However, the discussion of history is brief, and the point that learning the past produces “positive results on his degree” is unclear. The science-and-technology arguments are more developed, but some claims—such as countries becoming nuclear powers—are asserted without explaining their relevance or support. To strengthen the response, explain both viewpoints more evenly and make each example directly support a reasoned argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an opening, a paragraph for each viewpoint, a personal position, an example, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “On the other side,” “For example,” and “In conclusion” help signal these stages. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because ideas are loosely connected or unclear—for instance, the sentence about engineers building “emporiums colleges” and roads does not clearly develop the preceding point. Some linking phrases are also mechanical, and references such as “they” and “on that time” do not always make the connection between ideas clear. Use topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the claim it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “artificial intelligence,” “critical condition,” “scientist,” and “nuclear power.” These choices show an effort to discuss education, health, and national development. However, the range is limited and errors in spelling, word form, and collocation are frequent enough to make some meanings difficult to understand. Examples include “rose benefit,” “preffer,” “constructer,” and “created the antidote”; the intended meaning in some phrases, such as “roads are on and of packed,” is especially unclear. Build accuracy by learning common topic collocations and checking spelling and word forms. Prefer precise, familiar expressions over ambitious wording that does not fit the context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a conditional idea beginning “when they faces the critical factors.” However, control of sentence structure is limited, and attempts to combine clauses often produce faulty or incomplete sentences. For example, “In science and technology is gives positive results” has an unclear subject and verb structure, while “when most of the students done is degree … they going” lacks accurate verb forms. Agreement, articles, tense, and punctuation also need attention, as in “most of the doctor are served his time.” These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then join them with one clear subordinate clause.

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