Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In recent years lot of people argue that history is one of the most important school subjects , and other believe that in todays world subjects like science and technology are more important than history . As well as this essay will discuss the why lot of people argue history is better primary subjects , and other believe that science and modren technology are lot of important than history .

First and foremost lot people argue when child go to school in primary level and the read history , and the main important subject in the age of lower level . Furthermore when child go to primary level at school ,and they learn easily and listen meaning this eubject easily . For example when teacher taught the lesson in the classroom and they learn this lesson student easily , and in my prospective this lesson is very easy and difficult than science and technology subject .

However while other argue that science and technology subject is lot of important than history . Furthermore when people go to deliver the jon and the check the subject science subject is lot of important subject in all of these subject , but now lot of people choosing science subject than history . Additionally in lot of schools taught history subjects. For example when child learning easy subject and step by step they easily choose his mission , and in my prospective when child learn difficult and tough subject and they do not go to his mission .

In order to a recapitulate in my opnion science is better opportunities than history , and student easily solve and available his goal when they go to intermediate level .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You introduce both sides of the debate and give a clear preference for science in the conclusion, so the response does address the task. However, the discussion is only minimally developed: the history paragraph focuses mainly on children finding the subject easy, while the science paragraph makes broad claims about jobs and goals without explaining how science or technology benefits society. The examples are vague and do not clearly support the claims. Your position also shifts: the introduction says the essay will discuss why history is “better,” but the conclusion favours science. To strengthen the response, explain the value of historical knowledge as well as the practical benefits of science, then maintain one clear position and support it with specific examples. The stated length requirement is met; 20 words copied from the prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the intended discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and several linking expressions are repetitive or do not show a logical relationship. For example, “Furthermore” appears repeatedly, while “Additionally” introduces a point about schools teaching history that does not clearly connect to the preceding claim. Some sentences are difficult to follow because ideas are joined without clear relationships. The conclusion also introduces “better opportunities” without linking this claim to the earlier discussion. Use fewer, more precise connectors and organise each body paragraph around one main reason, followed by an explanation and a relevant example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “history,” “science,” “technology,” “primary level,” and “mission,” and the reader can generally identify the subject of the essay. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “important subject” and “lot of people” recurring, while several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear. For instance, “deliver the jon” and “available his goal” do not express the intended ideas clearly, and “better opportunities” is too vague to explain your preference. Spelling errors such as “modren” and “opnion” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of phrases for discussing educational value, employment, and historical understanding, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences using clauses introduced by “when,” “while,” and “and,” but these structures are often faulty, and much of the writing relies on simple sentence patterns. Errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “when child go to school” needs an article and subject–verb agreement, while “they learn this lesson student easily” has an unclear sentence structure. The opening also contains a run-on construction linking several ideas with commas and “and.” Practise writing one clear main clause at a time, then add subordinate clauses with accurate subjects and verbs. Check articles and punctuation during revision.

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