Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
I will discuss the development plan that how University Sports Centre look like after its development.
In future Leisure pool will be added that is much needed. On south side of it new changing room will be added. Cafe to be opened on the right side of main entrance. Two rooms will be allocated to dance studio which is needed in any sports centre. At the entrance if we look at our left side we can sew Sports shop that was missing in our last Sports Centre.
In fact University Sports Centre will look vibrant after addition of new facilities like Sports shop, Dance studio and cafe. These facilities was missing in old Sports Centre. Our University Sports Centre will be given more modern vibes with these changes and students will enjoy these changes. Hopefully everyone will visit University Sports Centre because most of students don't like old Sports Centre and visit it occasionaly.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response identifies several genuine additions, including the leisure pool, new changing room, café, dance studios and sports shop, so it shows some understanding of the future plan. However, it only reports a small selection of features and does not adequately compare the present and proposed layouts. Important changes are omitted, such as the sports hall, the gym’s eastward extension, and the retention of the 25m pool, seating and central reception. Some locations are also unclear or inaccurate: the café is described as being “on the right side of main entrance,” rather than in the south-east corner, and the sports shop is said to be left of the entrance without a clear plan-based description. The evaluative comments about what is “needed” and students’ likely behaviour do not summarize the visual information. Focus on the main spatial changes and an accurate overview.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the redevelopment, lists several proposed facilities, and ends with a general comment about the centre. This gives the reader some sense of progression, and phrases such as “In future” and “In fact” connect parts of the response. However, the organisation is not consistently suited to a map comparison: present and future features are not grouped or contrasted systematically, and the final sentences shift from describing the plan to predicting students’ reactions. Several short statements read like a list rather than a developed account. Improve the progression by giving an overview first, then describing the western and eastern changes in separate, clearly linked sections, while using precise references to locations and what remains unchanged.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The response uses some relevant facility vocabulary, including “Leisure pool,” “changing room,” “Dance studio,” and “Sports shop,” which helps communicate the main subject. There is also an attempt to use descriptive language such as “addition” and “modern vibes.” However, vocabulary is repetitive and sometimes informal or imprecise for an academic plan description. “Vibrant,” “modern vibes,” and “much needed” express personal evaluation rather than neutral reporting, while “look like after its development” is an awkward phrase. Spelling errors such as “occasionaly” and “sew” also reduce accuracy. Use more precise spatial and change-related terms, such as “located,” “expanded,” “replaced,” and “in the south-east,” and avoid unsupported opinions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
Most ideas can be understood, and the response attempts some longer constructions, for example, “Hopefully everyone will visit … because most of students don’t like old Sports Centre.” However, the range is limited, with many short, simple sentences, and errors recur in verb forms, articles, agreement and sentence construction. The opening phrase “discuss the development plan that how” is not grammatically well formed; “how University Sports Centre look like” also lacks the correct verb form and article. In “These facilities was missing,” the plural subject requires a plural verb, and “most of students” needs an article or possessive construction. Practise accurate present-versus-future forms and use a wider range of controlled comparison structures, such as “while” and “whereas,” to describe the two plans.
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