Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

its a nicework of engineering althoug we can guess all the main things by just viewing the diagram all the main things inside the diagram you can use alternate things by using the free space in the sports complex of university according to me outdoor courts now established in sports hall plus some other features like Dance studio,cafe moreover changing room instead of having only a simple outdoor courts the sports complex can be expands by occupying the extra space outside and merge all the free space into a excellent usefull place so if and if we use these spaces for the excellent use of students therefor we can have some good opertunites for better experience of all thsoe guys coming to the sports corner then they are also a source promotion for the sports complex of university so now on by comparing both of the plans we are having a better result then that of pst infeauture

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response recognises that the university plans to expand the sports centre and add facilities, mentioning the sports hall, dance studio, café and changing rooms. However, it only minimally reports the plans: it does not clearly compare the present and future layouts or describe key locations, such as the leisure pool replacing the western outdoor courts or the sports hall and studios on the east. The claim that the outdoor courts are “now established in sports hall” is also unclear and does not accurately explain the change. Much of the response shifts to opinions about benefits for students and promotion, rather than summarising the visual information. To improve, give a concise overview of the main changes, then report the most important additions and what remains in place.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to connect ideas using phrases such as “moreover,” “so,” and “then,” and the response stays broadly focused on the sports centre. However, it is presented as one long, loosely connected sequence, with no clear overview or progression from the current plan to the future plan. Repeated wording such as “all the main things” and “excellent use” does not help organise the information, while “so if and if” and “then they are also” make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Separate the response into paragraphs and organise it spatially or by change: first summarise the expansion, then describe the west, centre and east areas. Use linking words only where they clarify a comparison or sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “sports complex,” “outdoor courts,” “sports hall,” “Dance studio,” and “changing room,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise: “all the main things,” “excellent usefull place,” and “better result” do not describe the layout clearly. Several spelling errors, including “althoug,” “opertunites,” and “thsoe,” also make the text harder to read. Some phrases are not natural for this task, such as “outdoor courts now established in sports hall.” Build a more precise set of words for describing plans, including “remain,” “be replaced by,” “be added,” and “to the east/west of,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine ideas in longer sentences, for example with “although,” “moreover,” and “so,” but these structures are not controlled consistently. Several sentences run together without clear punctuation, and the opening, “its a nicework of engineering althoug we can guess,” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Verb forms and agreement are also problematic in phrases such as “the sports complex can be expands” and “if we use these spaces … therefor we can have.” Articles and sentence boundaries are often missing or unclear. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, then combine them accurately; for example, “The centre will expand into the former outdoor courts, and a leisure pool will be added on the west side.”

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