Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plan below demonstrates the layout of a institution sports centre now and how it will look after reconstruction.

As we can see that there will be a lot of changes will be occured first of all the outdoor courts on the left side turn into leisure pool with attached changing room furthermore on the right side outdoor courts amend with the sports hall after leaving sports hall there will be also build cafe and changing room moreover in front of changing room there are two more dance studio will be developed l.

Other the other hand, gym will also get bigger which cover area of seating and sports hall.

In contract 25m pool, seating area, reception area and changing room will remain same as before no changes will be made.

Finally leisure poll, sports hall, sports shop, cafe and sports hall will be developed while other things remain same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the task by describing the main changes in the sports centre. However, the overview is weak and the information is presented in a somewhat disjointed manner. While the key features are identified, the description of the changes is occasionally inaccurate or repetitive (e.g., mentioning the sports hall twice in the final paragraph). The response lacks a clear, cohesive summary of the overall transformation, which is essential for a higher band score in Task 1. To improve, ensure that the main trends are highlighted clearly in an introductory overview and that the details are grouped logically rather than just listing features.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hampered by poor sentence structure and a lack of effective cohesive devices. Transitions like 'furthermore' and 'moreover' are used, but they are often followed by run-on sentences or fragmented thoughts, making the progression of ideas difficult to follow. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the punctuation is inconsistent, which disrupts the reader's ability to track the changes from the current layout to the proposed redevelopment. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Words like 'developed', 'changes', and 'sports hall' are used frequently, and there are errors in word choice, such as 'amend' instead of 'replaced' or 'converted'. The phrasing is often unnatural, which limits the ability to convey information with precision. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider variety of verbs and nouns related to spatial changes, such as 'transformed', 'extended', 'relocated', or 'incorporated'. Expanding your range of descriptive language will help you report the information more accurately and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('changes will be occured'), tense usage, and sentence construction. Many sentences are run-on or lack necessary punctuation, which makes the text difficult to parse. There is a very limited range of complex structures, and the attempts at them are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring correct verb tenses, and using punctuation to separate distinct ideas. Reducing the number of errors in simple sentences should be your primary goal before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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