Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The diagram shows the structure of university sports center in present and some changes will be decided for future. Both diagrams illustrate the redevelopment of structure of university sports center.
If we see the, pool side in diagrams, In present and future, placement is almost same but the gym area will expanded. There is only two outdoor courts but in upcoming time, it will be construct from two outdoor court to sports hall, two dance studio in the east and leisure pool in the west.
The changing room and reception will still place where located in a present. in future there will be a two more changing rooms in east and west. one cafe will be plan to introduce behind the changing room of east. one sports shop will be plan to construct behind the changing room and leisure pool in west. the pool of university sports center will not be change from 25m.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the sports centre redevelopment, including the expansion of the gym and the addition of new facilities like the sports hall and dance studios. However, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant changes. While the key areas are mentioned, the comparison between the 'present' and 'future' layouts is occasionally confusing due to grammatical inaccuracies. To improve, ensure you provide a clear introductory overview that highlights the most prominent changes, such as the overall expansion of the facility, rather than just listing individual components. The response addresses the prompt but lacks the analytical depth required for a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into three paragraphs, which is a logical approach for this task. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive. Phrases like 'in future' and 'in present' are used frequently, which makes the flow feel mechanical. There is a lack of varied linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial changes described. Improving the use of transition signals and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic. There is a reliance on simple verbs like 'see', 'place', and 'construct'. While the student successfully uses some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'redevelopment', 'leisure pool', and 'changing rooms', there is little evidence of a wider range of vocabulary or collocations. Some word choices are awkward, such as 'upcoming time' instead of 'the future' or 'will be construct' instead of 'will be constructed'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more precise descriptive language and avoid repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement and passive voice construction, such as 'it will be construct' instead of 'it will be constructed' and 'one cafe will be plan' instead of 'a cafe is planned'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences and unnecessary commas. The range of sentence structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple or slightly flawed complex sentences. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for verb forms would help improve the accuracy of the writing.
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