Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In this topic basically new cover the new construction of the university sports area . Which are planed for the future .
Summery :
This picture show that’s the university administration decide to add some more activities to inhence the university sports area and also to develop the interest of students in sports .
University administrator give the idea of adding the pool ,sports hall ,dancing studio ,cafe and also sports shop for the students to buy the sports equipment and more over also design separate changing room for girls and boys also .For the gym guys they also increase the size of the gym and add more machine .which target the every muscle of the body separate .The location of the pool is decide on the west outdoor court the of the sports area and the on bottom side changing room for boys and in front for girls .The location sports for sports hall is east side outdoor court.On bottom right corner changing room is decide .The cafe is located in the front on the door of sports hall and dancing studio on the left side when you face the cafe .Main target is to give facility to the students
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to describe the changes, but it fails to provide a clear overview or a structured comparison between the 'now' and 'future' layouts. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, focusing on listing additions rather than summarizing the transformation of the space. Key features, such as the removal of outdoor courts to accommodate new facilities, are not clearly highlighted. The response lacks an analytical approach, instead providing a somewhat disjointed list of locations. To improve, you should group information logically (e.g., new facilities vs. expanded existing ones) and ensure a clear summary of the main trends is provided in the introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks a clear paragraph structure, with an informal 'Summery' heading and a lack of logical progression between sentences. Cohesive devices are largely absent or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'The location of...' and 'on the...'. The flow of information is mechanical and difficult to follow, as the description jumps between different areas of the plan without a clear spatial logic. To improve, use transition words like 'Furthermore', 'In contrast', or 'Additionally' to link ideas, and organize the response into distinct paragraphs for the introduction, overview, and body details.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'add', 'location', and 'side'. There are several instances of non-standard word usage, such as 'inhence' (enhance) and 'gym guys'. The phrasing is often unnatural, which hinders the precision required for a Task 1 report. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to spatial descriptions, such as 'situated', 'adjacent to', 'replaced by', 'expanded', and 'converted'. Avoid informal language and focus on using accurate terminology to describe the layout changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('This picture show'), article usage ('the university administration'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'Which are planed for the future'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic structures limits the score. To improve, focus on mastering simple sentence construction, correct verb tenses, and consistent punctuation before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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