Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plan depict of university sports center ,it shows the present and future plans. How it would look after redevelopment.

Overall ,after redevelopment the sports center almost become twice space then before as it include the outdoor courts thus add other activities and facilities. Which is dance studio ,leisure pool ,cafe ,changing rooms ,sports shop ,sport hall. which is not in the present plan.

In present plan ,there is two outdoor courts on both side of premises of sports center. At the center there is one reception counter in middle just behind that there is 25meter pool and on left there is changing room and on right there is seating area. In the last there is Gym.

In the redevelopment plan ,the both outdoor courts space include in center. So by entering on both extreme corner there were changing room and before that on left there going to be sport shop and on other side there were cafe. On the left side of changing room which open up directly to leisure pool. Even the Gym size would be twice size than before. On the right side just after entering to reception there is seating area and behind that there were sports hall .Also there were 2 dance studio beside each other on the same side.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.5
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers the main features of the plans, including the expansion of the gym and the addition of new facilities like the dance studios and sports shop. However, the description is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While the main changes are identified, the comparison between the 'present' and 'future' states is occasionally confusing due to imprecise language. For instance, stating that the sports center becomes 'twice space' is vague. To reach a higher band, you should focus on grouping information more logically and providing a more precise summary of the overall transformation, ensuring that all key changes are clearly contrasted rather than just listed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. Phrases like 'In the last' and 'In the redevelopment plan' are used to transition, but the internal flow within paragraphs is often disjointed. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'the both outdoor courts space include in center,' which makes it difficult to track the spatial changes. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' 'in contrast') and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to previously mentioned features would significantly improve the flow and logical progression of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'place,' 'side,' and 'center.' There are also noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'twice space' instead of 'twice the size' or 'double the floor area.' Additionally, there are minor errors in word formation, such as 'depict' instead of 'depicts.' To improve, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to describing layouts, such as 'situated,' 'adjacent to,' 'expanded,' 'converted,' or 'reconfigured,' which would demonstrate a more sophisticated control of language suitable for an Academic Task 1 response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The plan depict'), incorrect tense usage (e.g., 'there were changing room' when describing a future plan), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several sentence fragments and run-on sentences. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on consistent tense usage—specifically using the future tense for the redevelopment plan—and proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement will help improve your accuracy.

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