Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given maps illustrates a new plan to renovate the sports centre of a university.
Overall, the new plan contains various kind of new facilities, which are not available in the present centre. This include a new leisure pool, dance studios and so on.
The administration of the university decided to refurbish the sports centre, the new sports centre have new services which were not available in previous one. The most noteworthy change is new leisure pool which is to be constructed on the west end of the centre, while the older one remains at same place. Additionally, there are two new changing rooms to be constructed, one on west south end, while other on east south end. The administration also have a plan to make a new sports hall which is adjacent to old seating, furthermore two new dance studios will be constructed on north east end.
despite this, there are some similarities in both maps which are these, the old pool, the reception and the Gym will remain unchanged respective to their places.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the redevelopment plan, identifying key additions like the leisure pool, dance studios, and sports hall. However, the description of the layout is somewhat imprecise. For example, referring to the 'west south end' and 'east south end' is confusing, and the claim that the 'older one remains at same place' regarding the pool is factually incorrect based on the provided diagrams, which show the original pool being replaced or repurposed. While the overview is present, the analysis lacks the precision required for a higher band. The response would benefit from a more accurate spatial description and a clearer distinction between what is being added, moved, or removed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'furthermore', and 'despite this' are used to link ideas. However, the use of 'despite this' is inappropriate here, as it does not logically contrast with the preceding information. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final sentence where 'these' is used awkwardly to introduce the list of unchanged features. Paragraphing is present, but the flow between sentences could be smoother to improve the overall progression of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to describe the changes. There are some repetitive phrases, such as 'new sports centre' and 'constructed'. Some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'various kind of new facilities' (should be 'kinds') and 'respective to their places'. While the range is sufficient to convey the main points, it lacks the sophistication and precision in collocation required for a higher band. Spelling is generally accurate, but the overall lexical control is limited to basic descriptive language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The given maps illustrates', 'the new sports centre have', 'The administration also have'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas in run-on sentences. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent the response from reaching a higher band. A greater focus on proofreading for basic agreement and sentence boundaries would significantly improve the clarity of the writing.
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