Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The map shows the university sports center present and future plans and i will explain all the basic information from the given maps and i also give my sugesstion on this given maps.

Firstly, i like to talk about present maps areas. Mainly, the reception is just front of reception and in the left side of reception the changing room is located. Secondly, pool is located just behind the reception and there are many rooms shows in this map like gym, two outdoor courts each sides.

On the otherhand, the future plans map of sports center. In this map reception and pool located on the same place, fortheremore, there are many rooms are new in this map such as, two dance studio, leisure pool and sports shop, on the other hand, a new cafe will also appears in this map and many more new rooms and also a new pool.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately address the task requirements. While it attempts to describe the two maps, the information is presented in a disorganized manner and lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends. The student includes personal commentary ('i also give my sugesstion'), which is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. The description of the layout is vague and lacks precision, failing to highlight key changes such as the expansion of the pool or the relocation of specific facilities. The response does not effectively compare the two maps, resulting in a superficial overview that misses the core requirements of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks a logical progression of ideas. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and often incorrect way, such as the repetitive use of 'in this map' and 'on the other hand'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships described. The introduction is also problematic as it includes irrelevant personal statements rather than a concise summary of the visual data provided.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic, functional words like 'rooms', 'maps', and 'places' throughout the text. There is a lack of precise terminology required for describing architectural plans or spatial layouts, such as 'adjacent to', 'situated in the north-west corner', or 'undergone significant transformation'. Spelling errors, such as 'sugesstion', 'fortheremore', and 'appears' (used incorrectly), further detract from the quality of the writing. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with any degree of sophistication or accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('there are many rooms shows', 'reception and pool located'), article usage, and sentence structure. The writing relies almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty or fragmented. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. The lack of control over basic grammatical rules makes the text difficult to read and significantly lowers the overall quality of the response.

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