Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Here the plans of university's sport centre in which a reception hall at which the players or guest warmly welcome. In the west there is a leisure pool with outstanding and furnished floor. At front corner and beside of the swimming pool there are a changing room in which swimmers can change their outfits for swimming. At the end of swimming pool there is a sports hall in which different kinds of sports can be held. For entrance in the sports hall there is a changing room in front of the hall. Beside this changing room there is a cafe for refreshing. The players are warmly welcomed into the cafe, so that they become energized after playing games. There are so many games for the people who are not professionals. Also there is a gym in which every type of person can perform their activities for physical fitness. In short, the plan of such a university's sport centre is brilliant and outstanding because the people now a days very busy in their daily routines of life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to address the core requirement of the task, which is to compare the 'now' and 'after' plans. You have described the current layout in detail but completely ignored the proposed redevelopment. Furthermore, the task requires a summary of main features and comparisons, yet you have provided a subjective commentary on the quality of the centre ('brilliant and outstanding') rather than an objective report of the visual data. To improve, you must identify the changes (e.g., the addition of new facilities or the relocation of existing ones) and structure your response to contrast the two time periods clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. It is written as a single paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. There is no clear progression of ideas; you move from the reception to the pool, then the sports hall, and back to the cafe without a clear spatial or thematic order. Cohesive devices are largely absent or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'in which' to connect clauses. To reach a higher band, you should use separate paragraphs for the 'now' and 'after' plans and employ a wider range of linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', and 'subsequently' to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and often repetitive. You rely heavily on basic descriptors like 'outstanding', 'furnished', and 'brilliant'. Some word choices are unnatural in this context, such as 'players or guest warmly welcome' and 'every type of person'. There is also a lack of precise terminology related to describing maps or floor plans. To improve, focus on learning specific vocabulary for describing changes, such as 'expanded', 'relocated', 'converted', or 'demolished', and avoid using informal, subjective adjectives that are not appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammar is significantly flawed, which often impedes communication. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, such as 'Here the plans of university's sport centre in which...', which is a sentence fragment. You also struggle with articles ('a reception hall', 'the swimming pool') and subject-verb agreement ('people now a days very busy'). The range of structures is limited to simple sentences with basic relative clauses. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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