Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

first of all this univecity sports centre is below average from schools in turkey secondly there is a 25 meter pool a gym two room for social activityies and two outdoor court and also a reception the second plan shows they willl ad a cafe a sport show two dance studio and a leisure pool also they make two changing room anf make gym bigger thats good but also lesiure pool will built on outdoor court thats a bad thing for students who plays outdoor sport not only thşs but also they make building bigger than before they will take outdoor courts and add to the building but becouse all of this they build a brand new sports hall also when students get bored or tired they can socialieze with their friends at the cafe or when a student is newbie this student can buy things about sport and try them in the changing room next to the sport shop and cafe

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adopt an objective, academic tone required for Task 1. Instead of providing a neutral summary of the changes, the writer includes subjective opinions such as 'that’s good' and 'that’s a bad thing'. Furthermore, the response lacks a clear overview or a structured comparison of the two plans. While the main features are mentioned, the lack of formal reporting style and the inclusion of irrelevant personal commentary (e.g., 'when students get bored') significantly detract from the task requirements. To improve, focus on describing the physical changes—such as the expansion of the building and the replacement of outdoor courts—without offering personal judgment.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is written as a single, long paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of logical progression or paragraphing to separate the current layout from the proposed changes. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'also' and 'not only that but also'. The flow is disjointed, and the lack of punctuation makes it challenging for the reader to identify where one idea ends and the next begins. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks and a wider range of linking words to connect ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple verbs like 'make' and 'add'. There are numerous spelling errors, such as 'univecity', 'activityies', 'willl', 'anf', 'lesiure', and 'socialieze'. The word choice is informal and lacks the precision needed for an academic report. For example, using 'newbie' is inappropriate for this task. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to maps and diagrams, such as 'relocated', 'extended', 'converted', and 'demolished', and ensure you proofread for basic spelling accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There is a lack of sentence boundaries, with many run-on sentences and a complete absence of full stops or commas. Subject-verb agreement is often incorrect, such as 'lesiure pool will built' (passive voice error) and 'students who plays' (should be 'play'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structure, including the use of capital letters and terminal punctuation, and practice the correct formation of passive voice for describing changes.

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