Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The plans show the layout of a university sports center .
The old design dramatically was boring and simple, entering hall a reception with two doors that enter to pool straight there is gym with seating area or changing room . In west and west outdoor courts are . Now we turning to future plan new shape of sports center looks amazing front a reception, right a door of changing room in left seating area with gym, beside a sports hall . There some addition of many thing in top left corner sport shop for buy sport uses or right caf`e drinking two changing rooms also added . Swimming pool lead to enjoyment and leisure . Advancement in sports a view of modern center of present era . People really impressed by new style, there increase the number of student in university so, getting good sort education serving their country
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the changes, but it fails to provide a clear, objective summary of the main features. The description is highly subjective, using inappropriate language such as 'dramatically was boring' and 'looks amazing'. Furthermore, the final paragraph discusses the impact on students and the country, which is irrelevant to the task of describing a physical layout. The report lacks a clear overview and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the 'now' and 'future' plans. The information provided is disorganized and does not accurately reflect the visual data presented in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical organization. It is written as a single block of text without clear paragraphing to separate the introduction, the description of the current layout, and the proposed changes. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, making the progression of ideas difficult to follow. For example, the transition 'Now we turning to future plan' is grammatically incorrect and does not effectively signal a shift in time. The lack of clear referencing makes it hard for the reader to identify which part of the sports center is being described at any given time.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. The student uses informal and subjective language such as 'amazing', 'enjoyment', and 'impressed', which are not suitable for describing architectural plans. There are also significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'sport uses' instead of 'sports equipment' and 'beside a sports hall' used in a confusing manner. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the necessary technical details of the layout, and the errors in word formation frequently impede clarity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the meaning. Sentence structures are often fragmented or run-on, such as 'In west and west outdoor courts are.' There is a lack of control over basic syntax, including missing articles, incorrect verb tenses, and awkward phrasing. The attempt to use complex sentences is largely unsuccessful, resulting in errors that make the text difficult to parse. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with misused commas and a lack of proper sentence boundaries throughout the response.
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