Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the plans demonstrate the construction of university sports centre now and how it will looks after reconstruction. Overall if we compare the construction of university sports centre now and in future plkans so we see that present centre.in the west side the outdoorcourts are present while in the income days there will be lleisure pool and first entering the recepection the gym seating area are present . So in the present tthere are no lesiure cafe changing room sports shop and also no sports hall and dance studios are constructed while in the future in thre north side instead of outdoor courts there will be two seaction of dance studios are built .furthermore in the south side the reception arewa remains the same. also in the north area the the chaNging room aksop be bi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you attempt to describe the changes, the report is incomplete and ends abruptly mid-sentence. You have identified some main features, such as the dance studios and the pool, but the description lacks the necessary detail and comparative analysis required for a Band 6 or higher. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, and the failure to complete the task means that the overall development of the response is insufficient. To improve, ensure you provide a full overview and cover all key areas of the plans before concluding.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphing is non-existent or poorly managed, and the flow of ideas is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas together, making the text difficult to follow. For example, the transition between the present and future layout is confusing due to the lack of clear signposting. To achieve a higher score, you should organize your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and two body paragraphs detailing specific changes. Using linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', and 'subsequently' will help improve the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'plkans', 'recepection', 'lesiure', and 'aksop', which hinder readability. You rely on basic vocabulary to describe the plans, such as 'present' and 'built'. To improve, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to describing maps and changes, such as 'transformed', 'relocated', 'expanded', or 'demolished'. Additionally, ensure you proofread your work to correct basic spelling mistakes, as these errors become distracting and impact the overall quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('it will looks'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or poorly constructed, which makes the meaning unclear at times. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that your verbs agree with their subjects. Practice using a mix of simple and complex sentences, and pay close attention to articles and prepositions, which are frequently misused in your writing.

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