Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The plan illustrate the changing of university's sports centre before and after its development.
Overall, Pool , seating area ,reception and changing room remain same after the redevelopment .In contrast , Gym size slightly bigger in future plans . Some new areas build west and east side on outdoor courts. From the entrance both left and right a sport shop with changing room and right side cafe with another changing room . Dance area also create after the reconstruction.
Pool remain same 25 m in future plans .By following changing ,seating and reception rooms. In the Entry point build some new rooms and shop for instance west side sports shop and changing room , correct right corner of the entrance build a new cafe and changing room.
Leisure pool construct in front of sport shop according to future plan . Sports Hall also build beside the seating area ,whereas Two dance studios created in future quite nearly to Gym.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the sports centre redevelopment, identifying both the areas that remain unchanged and those that are being added or expanded. However, the description is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While the main changes are mentioned, the spatial relationships are sometimes difficult to follow, such as the vague description of the 'west and east side'. To improve, ensure that the overview synthesises the information more effectively rather than just listing features. The response addresses the prompt, but the lack of precise detail regarding the scale of changes (e.g., the expansion of the gym) limits the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are often abrupt, and the use of referencing is inconsistent, making it difficult for the reader to track the location of the new facilities. For example, phrases like 'By following changing, seating and reception rooms' are unclear and do not effectively link the information. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') to create a smoother progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic verbs like 'build', 'remain', and 'create'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'changing of university's sports centre' instead of 'changes to the university sports centre'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, it lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. Incorporating more specific terminology related to architectural changes, such as 'renovated', 'extended', 'converted', or 'integrated', would significantly enhance the quality of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The plan illustrate', 'Pool remain same') and article usage. Sentence structures are generally simple, and there is a lack of complex grammatical forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with irregular spacing around commas and periods. These errors occasionally impede the flow of reading. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions to describe locations on a map.
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